TPO-10 - Integrated Writing Task The sea otter is a small mammal that lives in waters along the western coast of North America from California to Alaska. When some sea otter populations off the Alaskan coast started rapidly declining a few years ago, it c

Both the reading and lecture is about the reduction of Ottoer population in western and North coast of America to Alaska in which the argument is whether the pollution or predation decline Ottoer population. Author of the reading mention the pollution based reason. But the lecture cast doubts about this reason. She says that the predator is the main reason for declining the number of Otter.
Firstly, the author of the reading mention the increase use of chemical is found in the water sample of the sea which cause pollution and ultimately decrease number of otter. He further says that otter resistance to chemical is decreasing and this is the reason why otter number is decreasing. The lecture challenged those point . She she says that if the pollution is the cause of death of otter there will be death otter in the sea. But no death otter found in the sea. So she finally concluded that it is not the chemical but the predator which feed otter are responsible the decline of otter.
Secondly, the author of the reading mention the other number of sea mammal is decreasing due to the decrease of otter. He further explains that it is due to the pollution which cause all the sea mammal to decline. The lecture challenge this statement. She explains that the reason of other sea mammal like whale decreasing is due to the over hunting not the pollution. She also elaborate that small predator feed up otter which cause the decreasing of otter.
Finally author from the lecture believe that other part of the sea where there is less pollution, the number of otter population remains stable. He concludes that this means the pollution in other part is few and that is the reason of their number remains stable. But the lecture rebut this statement. She says that otter in other part of the sea lives in shallow sea or rocky place where large predator cannot move for hunt. She finalizes that the location of the other parts gives benefit to the otter to survive.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: .
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Suggestion: She
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Suggestion: Finally,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 22.412803532 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 5.01324503311 419% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 1373.03311258 118% => OK
No of words: 345.0 270.72406181 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71304347826 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34399300003 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 145.348785872 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.365217391304 0.540411800872 68% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 506.7 419.366225166 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 3.25607064018 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.1682791535 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.3 110.228320801 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.25 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 7.06452816374 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343791126402 0.272083759551 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125800091445 0.0996497079465 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665978880952 0.0662205650399 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233602675503 0.162205337803 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609548415095 0.0443174109184 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 13.3589403974 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 12.2367328918 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.91 8.42419426049 82% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 63.6247240618 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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