TPO-13 - Integrated Writing Task Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other lar

The reading and lecture both discuss the effect of buying the fossils by privte collectors. While the reading states three disadvantges of having the privte buyers to these fossils, the professor refutes by saying, none of these claims are conviencing.

Firstly, the reading states that the community will sufer becuase there is no fossils they can see at the museum. As a result their intrest in fossils will decrease by time. On the other hand, the professor argues this notion by saying that fossils will have great exposure dut to the puplic commercial. So, many fossils will be there for purchase. As a result, people intrest will increase to contain fossil.

In addition, the article avers that many scientists will lose connection to these fossil because the prive collectors will by the fossils with high price. So, the scientists cannot compete with them. Nevertheless, the professor questions this idea by pointing out scientists will not going to lose any prcious fossils. This is because these fossils will be handled by scientists to do exmaniations and tests before the privte owners have it. As a result, the scientists will not miss anything.

Lastly, the article mentions that the scientits will miss important evidence related to these fossils because the privte buyers untrained. However, the professor refutes this notion by saying many fossils could not be discovered. In addition, many institutions could not have many fossil without these privte owners. So, it is much better for institutions and scientists to ger more fossils through these buyer otherwise many fossils will be hidden.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 67, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are no fossils'?
Suggestion: there are no fossils
...s that the community will sufer becuase there is no fossils they can see at the museum. As a result...
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Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... no fossils they can see at the museum. As a result their intrest in fossils will ...
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Line 5, column 77, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this fossil' or 'these fossils'?
Suggestion: this fossil; these fossils
...many scientists will lose connection to these fossil because the prive collectors will by th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 285, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'go'
Suggestion: go
...dea by pointing out scientists will not going to lose any prcious fossils. This is be...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 277, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun fossil seems to be countable; consider using: 'many fossils'.
Suggestion: many fossils
...ition, many institutions could not have many fossil without these privte owners. So, it is ...
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Line 7, column 400, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this buyer' or 'these buyers'?
Suggestion: this buyer; these buyers
... scientists to ger more fossils through these buyer otherwise many fossils will be hidden.
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, lastly, nevertheless, so, while, in addition, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 5.04856512141 317% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 12.0772626932 33% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1359.0 1373.03311258 99% => OK
No of words: 260.0 270.72406181 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22692307692 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57092010329 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 145.348785872 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503846153846 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 397.8 419.366225166 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0196803478 49.2860985944 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.9375 110.228320801 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.25 21.698381199 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3125 7.06452816374 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351181490893 0.272083759551 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150623941118 0.0996497079465 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685218587503 0.0662205650399 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230753028625 0.162205337803 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755843693273 0.0443174109184 171% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 63.6247240618 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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