TPO-13 - Integrated Writing Task Private collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other lar

As far as the sources are concerned, both the passage and the lecture discuss private collectors the reading passage states that selling to seldom and significant fossils are millions of dollars and this is an unlucky improved for both scientists and the general public. The listening passage, however, says that selling fossils besides negative affects of course there is also benefits
Firstly, unlike the lecture, the author points out that the public has problems hence private collectors do not let to see fossils which makes to decrease public interest in fossils. The speaker, however, goes on to say that this can lead to increase fossils.
Second, the author feels that scientists lose to some of the most crucial fossils and they are not able to compete
accomplished for fossils againist millionaire fossil buyers. The speaker, however, disagrees with the point of view. The professor says that the scientists have to identified the fossils.
Thirdly, in contrast to the speaker's point of view, the author points out that commercial fossil collectors make the fossils discover which is not useful for scientific evidence. The professor rejects this idea who states that the fossils are still unexplored.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...affects of course there is also benefits Firstly, unlike the lecture, the author...
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...ourse there is also benefits Firstly, unlike the lecture, the author points ou...
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...e fossils which makes to decrease public interest in fossils. The speaker, howeve...
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...ossils and they are not able to compete accomplished for fossils againist millio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, so, still, third, thirdly, in contrast, of course, in contrast to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 30.3222958057 69% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1026.0 1373.03311258 75% => OK
No of words: 194.0 270.72406181 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28865979381 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 4.04702891845 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53390758306 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 145.348785872 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551546391753 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 304.2 419.366225166 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 90.3202635071 49.2860985944 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.25 110.228320801 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 21.698381199 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.5 7.06452816374 219% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.48707811573 0.272083759551 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.196386085536 0.0996497079465 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123682772069 0.0662205650399 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282271782455 0.162205337803 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341170956681 0.0443174109184 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.3589403974 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.2367328918 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.7273730684 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.2008830022 152% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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