TPO-17 - Integrated Writing Task In the past century, the steady growth of the human population and the corresponding increase in agriculture and pesticide use have caused much harm to wildlife in the United States,birds in particular. Unfortunately for b

Both reading and lecture mention about birds population in which due to increase amount of population and due to increase of the use of agricultural lands there is decrease of wild life or not. The reading states that due to these reasons the bird population is decreasing day by day. But the lecture cast doubts about these reason. She says that the following reasons are not correct for the declining of birds.

Firstly, the author of the reading believes that birds population decreases due to the disappearance of habitat of birds. He says that the roaming place of birds like forest, wetlands, grasslands are diminished which causes the decline of birds population. But the lecture challenged this statement. She says that there is no decline in birds population. Moreover there is an increase of species of birds like eagles pigeon, hocs , and so on which are found in the streets. She also points out that these bird prey on other birds which population which may be decline.

Secondly, the reading points out that due to increase amount of population there is a increase need of agricultural land for food. so to support food for land there is use of wilderness which cause further decrease of population. But the lecture refute this statement. She argues that in USA to meet the demand of the extra population there is use of new more varieties of crops. So there is no need to depend on extra land which are used for birds roaming and no wetland is further destroyed.

Finally the reading says that there is a use of chemical pesticide which are harmful for birds population by reducing the reproduction of birds. The lecture opposes the statement people now a days are very much careful about pesticide use. So that there is a use of new much less toxic pesticide as well as pest resistant crops so that pest cannot cause harm to the plant. As a result there is no need of using pesticide.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 356, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...here is no decline in birds population. Moreover there is an increase of species of bird...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 411, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'eagles'' or 'eagle's'?
Suggestion: eagles'; eagle's
...is an increase of species of birds like eagles pigeon, hocs , and so on which are foun...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 430, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...pecies of birds like eagles pigeon, hocs , and so on which are found in the street...
^^
Line 5, column 85, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... increase amount of population there is a increase need of agricultural land for ...
^
Line 5, column 132, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ase need of agricultural land for food. so to support food for land there is use o...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...and no wetland is further destroyed. Finally the reading says that there is a use of...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 187, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...he lecture opposes the statement people now a days are very much careful about pesticide u...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 191, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...ecture opposes the statement people now a days are very much careful about pesticide u...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 241, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... very much careful about pesticide use. So that there is a use of new much less ...
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Line 7, column 377, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...at pest cannot cause harm to the plant. As a result there is no need of using pest...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 30.3222958057 158% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 5.01324503311 339% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 333.0 270.72406181 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73273273273 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55265464817 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.42042042042 0.540411800872 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 492.3 419.366225166 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.821833124 49.2860985944 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.9473684211 110.228320801 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5263157895 21.698381199 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57894736842 7.06452816374 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326148192235 0.272083759551 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111441465252 0.0996497079465 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06150139101 0.0662205650399 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216145171526 0.162205337803 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400013892157 0.0443174109184 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.3589403974 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.2367328918 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.42419426049 84% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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