TPO-17 - Integrated Writing Task In the past century, the steady growth of the human population and the corresponding increase in agriculture and pesticide use have caused much harm to wildlife in the United States,birds in particular. Unfortunately for b

The passage claims that the urban of human population affects the number of birds in The United States as the result of expanding in agriculture areas and using of pesticides. However, the lecture refutes every reason mentioned in the passage delving into many explanations for their claim.
For the first reason of decreasing the number of birds mentioned in the passage related to the growth of human population which results in disappearing of the bird's habitat like forests, wetlands, and grasslands and converting them to homes, malls and offices for the use of human. However, the lecture clarified that even though the urban caused shrinking in number of some kinds of bird's population, but it also provided better habitat to other kinds causing the increase in their growth like birds living near the beaches and the railroads.
Another reason impacts birds immediately according to the passage is the growing of agricultural areas which get along with the growing of human people, and as a result of that more and more birds habitat will turn to rural arear in order to provide people with products. On the other hand, the lecture refutes this idea asserting that less and less number of lands are using for agriculture purposes in the United States every year because people tend to produce crops more effectively by not destroying more areas.
The third reason responsible for decling bird's population mentioned in the passage is the effects of pesticides using to increase crops in the poisoning of the bird's food and water and deceasing their ability to reproductive. On the contrary, the lecture says that this reason is completely unconvincing according to the fact that nowadays everyone is aware to the harmful effects of the pesticides, and the farmers in their turns use new and cost pesticides causing no harm to the birds, and the plants as well are now modified to resist the pests and insects by themselves causing no negative effects on the birds.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 160, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'birds'' or 'bird's'?
Suggestion: birds'; bird's
...on which results in disappearing of the birds habitat like forests, wetlands, and gra...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 517, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fectively by not destroying more areas. The third reason responsible for decling...
^^^
Line 4, column 161, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'birds'' or 'bird's'?
Suggestion: birds'; bird's
... increase crops in the poisoning of the birds food and water and deceasing their abil...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, third, well, as a result, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 7.30242825607 205% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 30.3222958057 178% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 1373.03311258 120% => OK
No of words: 329.0 270.72406181 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00911854103 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58645290674 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465045592705 0.540411800872 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 517.5 419.366225166 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 41.0 21.2450331126 193% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.5933818201 49.2860985944 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 206.0 110.228320801 187% => OK
Words per sentence: 41.125 21.698381199 190% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.875 7.06452816374 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.421208198202 0.272083759551 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.194754716116 0.0996497079465 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108282244922 0.0662205650399 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252161730479 0.162205337803 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478496739848 0.0443174109184 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.7 13.3589403974 170% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.86 53.8541721854 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.3 11.0289183223 175% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.67 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 63.6247240618 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.4 10.498013245 175% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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