TPO 4
Throughout history, professional career has played a prevailing role in every individual’s life. In this regard, there is a long standing discussion among academicians about which factor is more important in selection of a job; security or the salary. some people are the leading proponents of the claim that we should contemplate money as our first priority in selecting a job. However, I firmly believe that no one could underestimate the effect of security when we accept a career. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoints through three noticeable reasons.
it is no secret that security is a priority in selection of a job which contributes to effeicient perfomance of an employer. when you know that the company could fire you whenever they do not need you anymore, you do not have the motivation for doing your responsibilities. this trend have adversely affected your performance as well as the company's profit. For example, you are a sales person at a company. you do not have enough motivation to put all of your effort for selling the company's production to customers. maybe you talk with them in an impolite way since you don't consider yourself as a member of the company. this way you do not enjoy your time at work , and maybe because of your behaviour the company loses some of his customers.
Psychologically speaking, after a certain time of working in a company you adapt to the environment of your workplace. you learn the rules that you should obey. you establish rapport with your co-workers. maybe you become close friends with each other. As a result, losing your job could undermine your self esteem which could lead to a variety of mental problems.
it goes without saying that you are never able to plan for your future since you do not know how long you could earn money. Although you receive a high salary, you experience a stressful situation in your life, and you are not financially stable which could result in failure in your life. A survey on effect of having security in individual's career has revealed that the possibility of success of a person could be increased up to 20% due to the precise plan they have for their future.
All aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that career security has a profound effect on our life which guarantee our success. Also, it provides a platform for us to establish strong relationship in our workplace. Furthermore, authorities should put more emphasis on encouraging people to consider security as their first priority in choosing a job. If not, we will witness a genration of people who suffer from lack of feeling security.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, for example, you know, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 5.04856512141 257% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 22.412803532 290% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 30.3222958057 201% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2211.0 1373.03311258 161% => OK
No of words: 448.0 270.72406181 165% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93526785714 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.04702891845 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90839434139 2.5805825403 113% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 145.348785872 158% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513392857143 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 419.366225166 166% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 3.25607064018 430% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.25165562914 399% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 13.0662251656 184% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2988975762 49.2860985944 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.125 110.228320801 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 7.06452816374 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 4.19205298013 406% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 4.33554083885 254% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.3589403974 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 63.6247240618 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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