tpo 42
The material discusses the concept of prevent the glass building from injuring birds which think that glass is an open air. While the reading looks at the topic from one perspective, the listening challenges certain points outlined in the reading passage.
Firstly, the reading details points in regard to this topic, namely replacing the clear glass with one-way glass. In addition to that, paint the glass with colorful stripes. One final point, using the magnetic field that steer the birds away from the glass building.
Conversely, the listening challenges the points, one specific contradiction is using the one-way glass can reflect the sunlight, the glass will be as mirror. Given that birds do not understand mirrors, they will fly through the sky which has been imaged on the glass. Next, the glass which colored with stripes has a clear glass in between these stripes, the birds will see them as open holes and try to fly through them. Otherwise, people should paint wide colored stripes to make these holes too small, but that will make the building so dark. Finally, using the magnetic field will not be effective, because birds use their magnetic sense when they travel long distance. When they travel short distance such as insider the cities, they use their eyes and bright light.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ints outlined in the reading passage. Firstly, the reading details points in r...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he birds away from the glass building. Conversely, the listening challenges the...
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Line 3, column 775, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., they use their eyes and bright light.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, firstly, if, look, so, while, in addition, such as, in regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 30.3222958057 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1087.0 1373.03311258 79% => OK
No of words: 216.0 270.72406181 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03240740741 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22256459554 2.5805825403 86% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 145.348785872 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564814814815 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 302.4 419.366225166 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.5127444795 49.2860985944 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.8181818182 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6363636364 21.698381199 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.81818181818 7.06452816374 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.501923566115 0.272083759551 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.200154163985 0.0996497079465 201% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0979723122864 0.0662205650399 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.334023293911 0.162205337803 206% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0892621329362 0.0443174109184 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 53.8541721854 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.0289183223 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 63.6247240618 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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