TPO-45 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important for universities to invest in infrastructure and physical plant than to invest in keeping the faculty satisfied. Use specific reasons and examples

The dominance of human beings over other species relies on their civilization and education. In the society which has evolved over time, family education is no doubt an important part of the development of a person. An obvious example is that in the past, young people always took account of their parents' opinion when making decisions. Yet it is believed by a throng of people that family education today is playing a less significant role than before and youngsters turn to make decisions on their own. From where I stand, I strongly agree with this statement and I will elaborate my point of view in the following essay.

Admittedly, most, if not all, young people in the past could not make a decision effectively and efficiently without the aid of their family members. First and foremost, parents could provide a suggestion based on their experience. Consider a case in which a young man had to decide which car to buy. It is not hard to imagine that parents who had suffered several natural disasters, like water contamination or heavy fogs, would suggest his offsprings to purchase a car with lower carbon emission or producing little toxic chemical, which would aggravate the atmosphere and further induce more cases of lung cancers. This example illustrates that in the past, the empirical knowledge of parents could facilitate young people to make important decisions.

Notwithstanding the aforementioned advantages of parents' suggestions, it is too hasty to conclude that the assistance of parents is able to play the same role as it did. In fact, with everything in the contemporary world changing so rapidly, much of their experience has become meaningless. For example, it is common that parents require their children to spend less time watching television with the aim to help them maintain a good eyesight. However, scientists have invented certain techniques that can make the screen of television less harmful to human vision and applied it widely, so children are less likely to become nearsighted due to overexposure to television. Unfortunately, children who are dependent on parents' suggestion and supervision are inclined to miss the opportunity to grasp useful knowledge from a variety of television programs.

Furthermore, the development of information technology has further weakened young people's dependence on their parents. Consequently, older people seem to be defeated by the Internet, which can provide an astronomical amount of information. It is unsurprising that as a new, popular invention, the Internet never fails to fascinate young people. For example, when they have some problems, youngsters can search an answer on Quora, where millions of users, including experts in all fields, online 24/7, can provide them with practical answers from the most professional perspective. There is no reason for young people to abandon this new choice but continue to rely on their parents who can only offer solutions based on their limited knowledge and experience.

To sum up, considering that a blanket of changes in our modern society not only make parents' assistance less useful but also bring a more omnipotent tool for young people to solve problems more trivially, it is reasonable that young people prefer to make decisions on their own.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, so, for example, in fact, no doubt, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 7.30242825607 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 12.0772626932 182% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 22.412803532 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 30.3222958057 264% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 20.0 5.01324503311 399% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2761.0 1373.03311258 201% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 528.0 270.72406181 195% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22916666667 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.04702891845 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92718427838 2.5805825403 113% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 145.348785872 193% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532196969697 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 864.9 419.366225166 206% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4296066167 49.2860985944 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.476190476 110.228320801 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1428571429 21.698381199 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90476190476 7.06452816374 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 4.33554083885 254% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0984934272368 0.272083759551 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0334342451214 0.0996497079465 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0265038112805 0.0662205650399 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0578863305633 0.162205337803 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317187296772 0.0443174109184 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.3589403974 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.8541721854 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 63.6247240618 217% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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