TPO 49- Integrated essay

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TPO 49- Integrated essay

Author and lecture talks about unique characteristics of hump back whale that is migrating to far distance to search for food and mate. Reading implies that whale navigates through stars location to reach destination. While, lecture states that there are no enough proofs to convince that.

Firstly, reading points out that whales have high intellectual capability and well developed sensory system to locate stars at night. Lecture refutes this argument. He states whales lack that ability to navigate through stars. In addition, he provides an example of ducks that follow this method of predicting direction from stars. As a consequence, he disagrees by explaining whale do not possess high cognitive function.

Secondly, author compares humpback whales with birds and animals because they both travel in straight lines they use specific landmark to judge the distance in straight lines. He also points out that humpback whales take help of stars to orient themselves to appropriate. On the other hand, lecture denies this by saying whales can maintain these straight lines due to strong external magnetic force. As they contain bio-magnetite in their body, which attracts with the magnetic field of earth and they re-orient them to straight line.

Third, author emphasize on spy-hopping personality trait; that is swimming with head above the ocean to keep track of stars. However, professor cast doubt on this. He sates that indeed whale do show this is less feature of spy hopping. But this doesn’t prove the point made in reading, because they usually do that during daytime. In addition, this behavior is also seen in sharks on contrary they are not long distance swimmers. So, it is worth saying that hump back whale do not rely on stars for migration.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 219, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...gh stars location to reach destination. While, lecture states that there are no enoug...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, well, while, in addition, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 22.412803532 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.01324503311 239% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1492.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 286.0 270.72406181 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21678321678 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55426700168 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 145.348785872 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608391608392 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 419.366225166 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8918127464 49.2860985944 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.8888888889 110.228320801 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8888888889 21.698381199 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 7.06452816374 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.428906457211 0.272083759551 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116800824342 0.0996497079465 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623920655078 0.0662205650399 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235305876079 0.162205337803 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538766534525 0.0443174109184 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.3589403974 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 53.8541721854 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 63.6247240618 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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