TPO 54 Integrated Writing

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TPO 54 Integrated Writing

The reading passage states three methods that can be used to reverse the trend of the Salton Sea becoming salty, whereas the professor believes that none of the method is practical.

To begin with, the reading suggests to use desalination facilities to evaporate the water from the lake into salt-free water with salt left behind. The professor however, argues that it will cause other environmental problems, because the solid left behind after the evaporation contains not only salt, but also chemical which is probably toxic. If the winds blow it in the air, people have to suffer from the risk of breath them in, which is dangerous to human lives.

Furthermore, the author of the passage advises to bring the ocean water directly into the lake as the salt level of the ocean water is 20 percent lower than that of the lake water. In contrast, the professor suggests that it is not realistic by the explanation that the far distance between the lake and the ocean makes it so expensive to build a pipeline which the government won't have any resource to pay for it.

Finally, the writer suggests to build walls to divide the lake into low-salt area and salty area on the basis of evidence that the freshwater from small rivers will lower the salinity of the main section which is smaller. On the contrary, the professor indicates that it may work but not for long due to the fact that the frequent geological activities will break down the walls. The barrier will collapse when the earthquake takes place the next time, which will cause the salt in the salty area will go back into the main section.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 48, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'bringing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'advise' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: bringing
...more, the author of the passage advises to bring the ocean water directly into the lake ...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, may, so, whereas, in contrast, on the contrary, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1330.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 281.0 270.72406181 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73309608541 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35925078353 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 145.348785872 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548042704626 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 419.366225166 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 21.2450331126 146% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 34.0685583297 49.2860985944 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.777777778 110.228320801 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2222222222 21.698381199 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8888888889 7.06452816374 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402112370663 0.272083759551 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156131410613 0.0996497079465 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149782844943 0.0662205650399 226% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215080276755 0.162205337803 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109728350691 0.0443174109184 248% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.3589403974 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 53.8541721854 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.75 12.2367328918 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.498013245 137% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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