The reading and the lecture are both about motivation. There are two ways that a human is motivated. One is with external rewards, such as money, approval or attention, this one is called "extrinsic" motivation. But there is another kind of motivation wich is the intrinsic motivation. The last one, occurs when a person is satisfied with what he or she does.
The lecture gives an example of a girl named Marie, that was really good at singing. She enjoyed and loved to sing everywhere she had the opportunity. The professor point out that her family and her friends put a lot of pression on her, they allways wanted to hear her sing. That is why, Marie did not enjoy singing anymore, because she had to do it even if she was not in the mood. And as is mention in the reading, this kind of reaction to public rewards it is called overjustification.
According to the reading, when a person has too much extrinsic rewards, he or she would diminish the intrinsic motivation, just like it happened to Marnie. The professor explained that when she bacame an adult, an important company ofered her a contract to sing professionaly. Marnie agreed with this, not because she enjoyed singing, but because she was thinking now in the reward.
In conclusion,both, the passage and the lecture conveys the idea that intrinsic motivation can change with the augment of external rewards.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 212, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun pression seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of pressions'.
Suggestion: a lot of pressions
...out that her family and her friends put a lot of pression on her, they allways wanted to hear her...
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Line 7, column 14, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , both
...king now in the reward. In conclusion,both, the passage and the lecture conveys th...
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Line 7, column 108, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...at intrinsic motivation can change with the augment of external rewards.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, as to, in conclusion, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1158.0 1373.03311258 84% => OK
No of words: 238.0 270.72406181 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86554621849 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96839744254 2.5805825403 115% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 145.348785872 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567226890756 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 360.0 419.366225166 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.6011495528 49.2860985944 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7142857143 110.228320801 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21428571429 7.06452816374 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 4.33554083885 300% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0869447733452 0.272083759551 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0320843078451 0.0996497079465 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408893935805 0.0662205650399 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0665413580319 0.162205337803 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437413228204 0.0443174109184 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.3589403974 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 12.2367328918 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 63.6247240618 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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