The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
What is life ? Some time i ask question to myself. whether it full of luxuries or fulsome amount of wherewithal or it might be frugality or pauper. Then some time later i understand when u struggle , u fall down and then stand up on your own toe it biggest beatific think in our life. so i complete agree with luxuries and conveniences thing prevent people from developing into true strong and independent individuals.
The luxuries and conveniences if get early stage of in your life it difficult to sustain your self in this world. such luxuries can hamper your physical and mental growth. for ex, one of mate always come in school by car at some stage if got obese at that time he cant even sat three hours for examination. he cant get chances to participate into sports.
There are lot of people has fulsome money get by there parent or grand parent. so they all most dependent on such father or mother. such dependent thing can be giant rival of there own life. such people cant well teach or not able to any kind of work. ex rancho one of my brother full dependent on my uncle. they both are good doctor. but rancho just enjoy there life in play pc game and enjoying party. so he cant even teach or want education not get job also.
The luxuries and independent life bring laziness and unwanted habit. such enjoy party, drugs and alcohol. this is totally waist of money and our lives. that drugs harm your kidney or major limbs of your body.
Some time peoples are talented these know how to take advantage of such luxuries life. they such money and make it own business or some thing innovation. or some people like live Spartan life. they dont bother of such luxuries and donate money to poor or needed people.
So there are porn and cons of luxuries life but it completely depended on people how he want to live. but i think in life no pain no gain, and such gain taught very much in your life. so completely agree luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
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Sentence: Some time i ask question to myself. whether it full of luxuries or fulsome amount of wherewithal or it might be frugality or pauper.
Description: The word i is not usually used as a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Replace i with I
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to it and full
Description: The fragment of wherewithal or is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace wherewithal with adjective
Sentence: The luxuries and conveniences if get early stage of in your life it difficult to sustain your self in this world. such luxuries can hamper your physical and mental growth. for ex, one of mate always come in school by car at some stage if got obese at that time he cant even sat three hours for examination. he cant get chances to participate into sports.
Description: A conjunction, subordinating is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to if and get
Description: The token of is not usually followed by a preposition
Sentence: There are lot of people has fulsome money get by there parent or grand parent. so they all most dependent on such father or mother. such dependent thing can be giant rival of there own life. such people cant well teach or not able to any kind of work. ex rancho one of my brother full dependent on my uncle. they both are good doctor. but rancho just enjoy there life in play pc game and enjoying party. so he cant even teach or want education not get job also.
Description: The fragment money get by is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace get with verb, past participle
Sentence: So there are porn and cons of luxuries life but it completely depended on people how he want to live. but i think in life no pain no gain, and such gain taught very much in your life. so completely agree luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to luxuries and life
Description: The fragment he want to is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace want with verb, past tense
Description: The fragment life prevent people is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace prevent with verb, past tense
Sentence: Some time i ask question to myself. whether it full of luxuries or fulsome amount of wherewithal or it might be frugality or pauper.
Error: wherewithal Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: fulsome Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: frugality Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: So there are porn and cons of luxuries life but it completely depended on people how he want to live. but i think in life no pain no gain, and such gain taught very much in your life. so completely agree luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Error: porn Suggestion: No alternate word
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 370 350
No. of Characters: 1640 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.386 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.432 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.316 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 88 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 58 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 46.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.732 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.466 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.836 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.2 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5