The following appeared in a letter from the manager of a rock band named Double Rice. "One year ago, tickets for Double Rice's concerts in stadiums around the country took, on average, at least 24 hours to sell out, if they sold out at all. But the band has been enjoying a surge in nationwide popularity among 14 to 25 year olds, and the 30,000 tickets for a recent concert in Megalopolis sold out in 12 minutes. Clearly the ticket sales in Megalopolis are a result both of the band's increased popularity and of the advertising campaign run in Megalopolis by the Ad Lib advertising agency. Thus, in order to ensure that the band's success in Megalopolis is repeated across the country, the band should hire Ad Lib to duplicate the Megalopolis ad campaign on a nationwide scale. " Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument.
The author of this argument claims that the band should hire Ad Lib to increase its sales and fame in national scale. To support this recommendation the speaker cites the following facts. (1) One years age, this band sold concert’s tickets in around the country at the 24 hours, while the recent concert’s tickets in Megalopolis were sold in 12 minutes. (2) The author believes that increasing their popularity between 14 to be 25 years old is due to the advertising campaign run in Megalopolis by the Ad Lib advertising agency. (3) So, this agency can help the band in the nationwide. Close scrutiny of each of these factors, however, reveals that none of them lend credible supports to the recommendation.
First, the argument relies on the assumption that the band sold more tickets, because of the use effective advertisements. Conversely, it entirely is possible that its high sales were due to other factors such as the lower price, concert time, the number of people who live in the Megalopolis, or even concert venue. In deed, if the concert held in the countryside, where people did not have access public transportation, and as a result; the bans could not sell more. Moreover, the ban may hold the concert in summer, when most people have enough spare time to go to concerts. Since the author has not identified the main cause of high sells, I cannot believe that advertising is the foremost cause for that.
Second, base on the fact that a certain advertising agency helped the band to increase their reputation in the Megalopolis, the author infers that this band should use this agency’s advertisements in nationwide scale. Although, common sense informs me that this relationship exists, there is no warrant to show that this agency can assist the band to gain achievements in the national scale.
All above evidence supports this fact the argument is logically flawed and therefore, unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen the author must provide more information about the number of sold thickets in past years. In order to assess this recommendation, it would be better to know about all factors, which are influential on increasing their reputation and sales. Moreover, the author should identify that how he concludes the band can be successful in the nationwide by hiring this agency.
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Discourse Markers used:
['conversely', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'while', 'such as', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.259681093394 0.25644967241 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.127562642369 0.15541462614 82% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0865603644647 0.0836205057962 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0341685649203 0.0520304965353 66% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0273348519362 0.0272364105082 100% => OK
Prepositions: 0.125284738041 0.125424944231 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0205011389522 0.0416121511921 49% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.8219969246 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0318906605923 0.026700313972 119% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.134396355353 0.113004496875 119% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0250569476082 0.0255425247493 98% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0113895216401 0.0127820249294 89% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2341.0 2731.13054187 86% => OK
No of words: 389.0 446.07635468 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.01799485861 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.57801047555 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.362467866324 0.378187486979 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.239074550129 0.287650121315 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.169665809769 0.208842608468 81% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.107969151671 0.135150697306 80% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8219969246 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 207.018472906 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53470437018 0.469332199767 114% => OK
Word variations: 59.7403904369 52.1807786196 114% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 22.8823529412 23.2022227129 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7009455304 57.7814097925 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.705882353 141.986410481 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8823529412 23.2022227129 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.764705882353 0.724660767414 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.58251231527 167% => OK
Readability: 46.789807954 51.9672348444 90% => OK
Elegance: 2.14457831325 1.8405768891 117% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.422449439789 0.441005458295 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.107930145905 0.135418324435 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0611134918132 0.0829849096947 74% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.600388189963 0.58762219726 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.110281813981 0.147661913831 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.204227789082 0.193483328276 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0823273158265 0.0970749176394 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.494155006025 0.42659136922 116% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0710261244367 0.0774707102158 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.316265088693 0.312017818177 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0659160097199 0.0698173142475 94% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.33743842365 132% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.87684729064 29% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 6.46551724138 155% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 14.657635468 109% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 67.73 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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