TPO 25
In general, the statement is one of the major consideration of people including my family members. Some may holds the view that teenagers do not need a part time work in order to be successful one in the future. I, however, after thinking about the direction, decided to stand up in contrast with this view. I guess providing following reasons to support my perspective is crucial.
The first important factor which comes to mind is that in this way children learn how to save money. Since teenagers during a part-time job face with a lot of difficulties to earn money, they know the value of their wage. It is clear that they try to spend less money in order to buy unnecessary things. Hence, by these words, they may save more money for their future career. I think that a small example can give some light. Imagine a boy who is a seller next to his father. It would seem to me that he feel more responsibility toward his earning money. Moreover, he dos not purchase unessential things like extra cloth.
Another significant reason involved in this issue in that these kinds of young persons may be independent one earlier than other boys and girls. Due to the fact that in this side, a person start to work earlier, he make his own money earlier,too. Therefore, such a teenage is a person who can get married as soon as possible and make his family. In my point of view, taking a job by a youngster play unavoidable role during his future responsibility. I guess that there is not a better example that my brother as a person who started to work when he was 14. Now, he is just 22 and he has his own house and job. In addition, he got married some years ago.
Admittedly, there are some justifications by groups of persons who argue that a person doesn't need find a part-time job to be a successful one during adult life. First of all, they believe that our life completely is affected by education. Therefore, parents should focus just on children's education system and some other activities such as sport, art. However, still I confirm that taking a job by a teenage is more effective than education fore adult life. For example, a young person who touch a lot of problems during work times know more than a child who just study theoretically.
In sum, from above mentioned significant causes, reaching the conclusion that having part-time job for teenagers improve their future life, is marked
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 153, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...s the view that teenagers do not need a part time work in order to be successful one in t...
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Line 5, column 216, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'makes'.
Suggestion: makes
...ide, a person start to work earlier, he make his own money earlier,too. Therefore, s...
^^^^
Line 5, column 242, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , too
...k earlier, he make his own money earlier,too. Therefore, such a teenage is a person ...
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Line 7, column 88, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...oups of persons who argue that a person doesnt need find a part-time job to be a succe...
^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'for example', 'i guess', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'in general', 'such as', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.230607966457 0.229887763892 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.148846960168 0.158761421928 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.083857442348 0.0866891130778 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0503144654088 0.046263068375 109% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0691823899371 0.0685040099705 101% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129979035639 0.118717715034 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0293501048218 0.0351676179071 83% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.63463563277 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0293501048218 0.0309702414327 95% => OK
Particles: 0.0020964360587 0.00188951952338 111% => OK
Determiners: 0.0922431865828 0.0887237588012 104% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0146750524109 0.0209618222197 70% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0188679245283 0.0139019557991 136% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2407.0 2387.08602151 101% => OK
No of words: 428.0 408.028673835 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.6238317757 5.86048508987 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.28738317757 0.338922669872 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.200934579439 0.251872472559 80% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.13785046729 0.174417080927 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.10046728972 0.112833075102 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63463563277 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539719626168 0.524397521467 103% => OK
Word variations: 62.5114324596 59.2087087015 106% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.12 20.5533526081 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.7670993108 48.84282405 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.28 120.699889404 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.12 20.5533526081 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.68 0.644075263715 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 37.2134579439 45.7405998639 81% => OK
Elegance: 1.453125 1.45489161554 100% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.300154397459 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0791727362917 0.103427244359 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0538598751352 0.0752933317313 72% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.443311150043 0.497263757937 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.161714228094 0.151897553556 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.114077575197 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0781384742642 0% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.24552023306 0.336927656856 73% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0692318858344 0.067059652881 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.210909579961 0% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0618886996521 0% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.91756272401 203% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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