The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry , or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
cooperation or competition - which will instill better leadership characteristics among youth?? The speaker says its this dispute. looking at them one by one - cooperation means working together to achieve a particular goal while competition means some kind of rivalry focussed towards a goal . The speaker is in the favour of cooperation, being a better source for providing required leadership skill, than competition. But I disagree with the speaker .
firstly,the word competition has its origin from the word compete which means a kind of fight (not physical)among people for achieving the best reward being given.Competition teaches oneself what victory actuallly is if there would be no competition noone would be running to win . take a small example - there is a race among ten students with a winning prize of gaming console. here we have only one gaming console as the prize .so only one student will be getting that. this prize arouse a sense of competition among them and they strive to do better than their counterparts. If we had same ten winning prizes for each one of them no one will compete and hence the individual skill of each of them wouldnot have come out .and victory would have no meaning .everyone would be a victor then.
similarly every team has a leader . the leader is one who can bind the team, guide them properly and help them achieve the success . so for this job we need an adroit human being.here we have to make sure that the best person fit for the job should get this job and to get the person everyone in the team should have a sense of competition if they dont have this sense then it will become impossible for us to judge the best person. so once they start competing among themselves they will always looks for ways to defeat their counterparts hence showing and improving their skills. and moreover if a team is having more than one leader then there would be ambiguity in decision making leading to failures.
competition is not only important in getting the best out of oneself but also in refining or policing the skill one already has. competition leads to innovations. suppose we have only one online shopping website. this makes the whole online shopping too conventional and boring and may be inefficient sometime because it has no competitor in the market .once we have several option to shop online each one of them will think of getting their sites on different platforms , getting new thing on their site to get better revenues than the other and hence some kind of regular innovation will happen.
Praising the word "competition ", I would not say that there is no meaning of cooperation in industries or government . As someone has truely said that "if you want to go fast go alone but if you want to go far go together". coopoeration always helps one to get the work done easily. cooperation, unity, reliance ,trust these are the binding materials of a team and every team need that to achieve good things.say a company where people always quarrel will have a bleak future as in contrast companies with cooperating employees have a great time ahead. but when it comes to the refinement of skill competition does the job better .
In sum, speaker is correct to his part in saying that cooperation is required for generating leadership skills among youth but i believe competition has its advantages over doing this job over cooperation . no doubt in long run both competition and cooperation is needed to run a industry or government efficiently.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.230414746544 0.240241500013 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.179723502304 0.157235817809 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0599078341014 0.0880659088768 68% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0599078341014 0.0497285424764 120% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0552995391705 0.0444667217837 124% => OK
Prepositions: 0.112135176651 0.12292977631 91% => OK
Participles: 0.047619047619 0.0406280797675 117% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.79748349268 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0276497695853 0.030933414821 89% => OK
Particles: 0.00153609831029 0.0016655270985 92% => OK
Determiners: 0.10599078341 0.0997080785238 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0276497695853 0.0249443105267 111% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0122887864823 0.0148568991511 83% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3541.0 2732.02544248 130% => OK
No of words: 611.0 452.878318584 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.79541734861 6.0361032391 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97176167858 4.58838876751 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.309328968903 0.366273622748 84% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.23240589198 0.280924506359 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.148936170213 0.200843997647 74% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.108019639935 0.132149295362 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79748349268 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 219.290929204 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469721767594 0.48968727796 96% => OK
Word variations: 57.6115937036 55.4138127331 104% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6194690265 126% => OK
Sentence length: 23.5 23.380412469 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 89.1873568135 59.4972553346 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.192307692 141.124799967 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 23.380412469 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.653846153846 0.674092028746 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 57.0 5.21349557522 1093% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 46.740589198 51.4728631049 91% => OK
Elegance: 1.32291666667 1.64882698954 80% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38031678703 0.391690518653 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0845547456759 0.123202303941 69% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0619491588155 0.077325440228 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.464746798654 0.547984918172 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.169324848254 0.149214159877 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122088717986 0.161403998019 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0835709554734 0.0892212321368 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.306471916818 0.385218514788 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0649731450186 0.0692045440612 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242384697411 0.275328986314 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460806908126 0.0653680567796 70% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.4325221239 163% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 15.0 7.22455752212 208% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.5995575221 162% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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