celebrities are more influential on young people
Young people are in an impressionable age. Several factors are influential on them and they could easily get influenced by them. One of the constant complaints of parents is about the degree in which their children are influenced by celebrities. They usually think that what celebrities wear and say could determine the way that their children would wear and speak too. However some people disagree with this issue and they claim that parents themselves are more influenced by celebrities, but I'm of the opinion that the former viewpoint is more correct and several reasons support my idea.
First of all, age is a crucial and determining factor of the level in which we are impressionable. Several psychological researches have proved this fact that the more aged people are, the less impressionable they are. One reason for this fact is that our experience would be accumulated during our life. When people experience different situations in their life, their attitude toward different concepts would get more complicated. They get aware of different aspects of an event and it's unlikely they would get impressed by only one facet of an event or issue. For instance when a singer sings about poverty it would radically spur on young people to do something for poor people. They are probably for the first time confronted with the grief of poverty and it has stimulated them to do something to help the poor people. However, an aged person would not get impressed as much as a young person mostly because he has already gotten aware of sorrow of poverty and also he knows that it's impossible to solve this issue by individual attempts. He knows that all of these attempts that are driven by emotional stimuli are transient and would not last very long. So thanks to his experience he would not be deeply influenced by that singer, contrary to that young person.
Secondly, most celebrities are similar to young people. Indeed young people would determine who could be a celebrity and who can not be. This is because most of middle-aged or old-aged people don't have enough time or passion to pursue the works of celebrities, like actors or athletes. They are profoundly engaged in their own life affairs and they don't keep abreast of news related to celebrities. So those celebrities who have different viewpoints than young people would have less chance of being popular among [by] them and since the majority of celebrities' audience are young people, they would finally vanished from spotlight and wouldn't be followed by young people. On the other hand, when young people found their celebrities similar to themselves they are more influenced by them. As a general rule, people are more influenced by those similar to them. Since young people consider celebrities are similar to them, their actions and sayings are more influential on young people than aged people who are different from celebrities.
All in all, I believe celebrities are more influential on young people mostly because young people are less experienced and also celebrities have similar characters to young people.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'for instance', 'first of all', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.197463768116 0.229887763892 86% => OK
Verbs: 0.153985507246 0.158761421928 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.128623188406 0.0866891130778 148% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0688405797101 0.046263068375 149% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0742753623188 0.0685040099705 108% => OK
Prepositions: 0.126811594203 0.118717715034 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0307971014493 0.0351676179071 88% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.67577074104 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0235507246377 0.0309702414327 76% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0688405797101 0.0887237588012 78% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0271739130435 0.0209618222197 130% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0199275362319 0.0139019557991 143% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3088.0 2387.08602151 129% => OK
No of words: 513.0 408.028673835 126% => OK
Chars per words: 6.01949317739 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.331384015595 0.338922669872 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.255360623782 0.251872472559 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.163742690058 0.174417080927 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.12865497076 0.112833075102 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67577074104 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430799220273 0.524397521467 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 49.2963827819 59.2087087015 83% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.375 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1569838361 48.84282405 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.666666667 120.699889404 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.375 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 46.9110623782 45.7405998639 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.19512195122 1.45489161554 82% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.422668640544 0.300154397459 141% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.166260872971 0.103427244359 161% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.110893089754 0.0752933317313 147% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.476103613441 0.497263757937 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.172994254516 0.151897553556 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177542325498 0.114077575197 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.174163966741 0.0781384742642 223% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.472858222854 0.336927656856 140% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0473590753212 0.067059652881 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.391070331988 0.210909579961 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.185523285025 0.0618886996521 300% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 23.0 13.6433691756 169% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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