"Traffic here in Waymarsh is becoming a problem. Although just three years ago a state
traffic survey showed that the typical driving commuter took 20 minutes to get to work, the
commute now takes closer to 40 minutes, according to the survey just completed. Members
of the town council already have suggested more road building to address the problem, but
as well as being expensive, the new construction will surely disrupt some of our residential
neighborhoods. It would be better to follow the example of the nearby city of Garville. Last
year Garville implemented a policy that rewards people who share rides to work, giving
them coupons for free gas. Pollution levels in Garville have dropped since the policy was
implemented, and people from Garville tell me that commuting times have fallen
considerably. There is no reason why a policy like Garville's shouldn't work equally well in
Waymarsh."
Merely based on groundless evidence and doubtful assumption, the arguer arbitrary draws a conclusion that Waymarsh should take the same policy as Garville's to solve the traffic problem. To substantiate the conclusion, the arguer points out that a survey three years ago suggests that it used to cost 20 minutes in commuter while it takes about 40 minutes now. Furthermore, the arguer demonstrates that the policy in Garville works well by reward the people who share rides to work. Additionally, the arguer illustrates that people from Garville toll him that commuting times decreased. Plausible as it is, a further introspection reveals that it contains several logic flaws.
First, things will not remain the same as the time pass by, the survey three years ago can not always fit in the traffic problem. By that I mean, it is highly possible that the city was much smaller three years ago so people live close to their workplace and it took less time driving commuter than today. Moreover, people might perfer to choose the company which was closer before or the company offered their house near the company. However, due to the depress of the economy, there is no more such support to people.
Second, the arguer's recommendation relies on what might be a poor analogy between the problem in Waymarsh and Garville. To be more specific, the analogy falsely depends on the assumption that the traffic situation in both places are similar. Nonetheless, it is entirely possible that most people in Waymarsh use the public transportation to work and people in Garville prefer to drive their own car to work. Therefore, if government take the same policy, it will be less effective in Waymarsh to encourage sharing ride.
Third, the argument assumes that the nationwide statistics about the commuting time apply equally to the time which people told him. Yet that might not be the case, for a variety possible reasons. For example, the people move to a place which is closer to the company so it takes less time to work. Additionally, the people who have lower commuting time is just a little part in the city and large amount of people there is still suffering the trafic problem.
To put it in a nutshell, the arguer fails to confirm his claim because the evidences cited above cannot lend a effective support to what he maintains .
- "Over 80 percent of the respondents to a recent survey indicated a desire to reduce their intake of foods containing fats and cholesterol, and today low-fat products abound in many food stores. Since many of the food products currently marketed by Old Dai 10
- Scientistsandotherresearchersshouldfocustheirresearchonareasthatarelikelytobenefitthegreatestnumberofpeople. 16
- "Traffic here in Waymarsh is becoming a problem. Although just three years ago a statetraffic survey showed that the typical driving commuter took 20 minutes to get to work, thecommute now takes closer to 40 minutes, according to the survey just completed 66
- Scientists and other researchers should focus their research on areas that are likely to benefit the greatest number of people. 54
- People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making. 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 146, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Waymarsh should take the same policy as Garvilles to solve the traffic problem. ...
^^
Line 1, column 644, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is, a further introspection reveals that it contains several logic flaws. Firs...
^^
Line 3, column 452, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...house near the company. However, due to the depress of the economy, there is no more such s...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 13, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguers'' or 'arguer's'?
Suggestion: arguers'; arguer's
... such support to people. Second, the arguers recommendation relies on what might be ...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 110, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e the evidences cited above cannot lend a effective support to what he maintains ...
^
Line 9, column 150, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...a effective support to what he maintains .
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nonetheless, second, so, still, therefore, third, well, while, for example, i mean
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 396.0 441.139720559 90% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91666666667 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59851484023 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532828282828 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3003540559 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 108.166666667 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94444444444 5.70786347227 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200771373594 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580632004804 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664535479041 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0977430936566 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0612073517044 0.0628817314937 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.