claim: many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.
Reason: laws cannot change what is in people’s hearts or minds.
Nearly all the nations in the world enact various kinds of laws, aiming to keep people in order, to enhance their consciousness, and to train them to have a sound personality. And the majority of people often follow the rules of the country which they live in or travel to, but only a very few people may persist in acting on their own minds regardless of the laws and regulations. Laws, in some sense, can change people’s minds, but they cannot completely transform every person in the country from their bad minds. For another reason, people have the right of freedom of their minds and hearts, and only if they behave within the laws, they will not be punished. And, it must be pointed out that there is no all-embracing laws in the world, which always are amended according to different situations with the passing of time. Particularly, it is in modern society that more and more new problems are springing up, and sometimes there are no corresponding laws to deal with them.
As a child, one usually is taught to obey the laws by his family or watching the legal programs, and so he begins to increase the awareness of legal system, and knows that evil minds which produce harmful consequences will bring punishment on himself. Laws play a larger part in our daily life, and we all live by a code in a society in which people pursue for equality, peace, freedom and safety. Parents send their children to school in order to let them become an enlighten person who will behave in a way that observes the laws and disciplines in the future. The majority of people act in a way that best promotes the interest of the country, and they know that only if they could do something that is beneficial to the country, they would equally do good for themselves. For example, under the Environmental Protection Act, people learn to protect Mother Nature?——not to destroy rainforests which supply two-third oxygen that people need; not to hunt wild animals and to safeguard their habitats, for they are good for agriculture, ranching, forestry; especially to save rare plants and animals, which protect the biodiversity that is significant for progeny to survive and develop.
But human nature is two-elements, good and evil, which depends on the person’s minds and his acting. Of course, we must admit that most of us have a good heart and do merciful deed. Nevertheless, a few people break the laws even if they know that they will face punishment. Take corruption as an example, in China, the central government launched anti-corruption campaign in 2014 and sixty-eight senior officials accepted legal sanction in that year, for they gained personal benefits by abusing their power with the defiance of laws. In another instance, some enterprises obtain the interests by manufacturing fake and shoddy products. The 2008 Chinese milk scandal was a food safety incident, involving milk and infant formula adulterated with melamine, in which the business leaders did not consider the health of infants at all with a result of six infants dying from kidney stones and tens of thousands of other baby victims. In modern society, such irregularities are countless. On the other hand, people have freedom of minds and hearts. They can image everything and freely express their emotions, and maybe that is the rub that laws cannot absolutely change them, for they cannot regulate details of human beings’thinking and expression ways .
So, large numbers of problems generate in our society, which are needed to be settled outside the legal framework, such ways as religion, belief, morality, custom, arts, and so on. People should strive for civilization and courtesy——forbidding loud speak in public places, no spitting, respecting the elders, wasting food, treating others kindly, etc,. In China, Confucianism is deeply rooted in people’ mind and behavior from one generation to another, which teach people such things as ren(humaneness), yi(righteousness), li(proper rite), and xin(integrity), and have been popular at home and abroad. what’s more, arts is one way for people to relieve their feelings, such as music, which helps them quieten down from being irritable and escape from distress and depression; and dance, which is a good outlet to relax themselves from stress from both life and work.
Moreover, there are no all-embracing laws, which, with the technological advancement and the development of society, always have some limitations. It is the government that passes laws and put them into force,and it cannot be made frequent changes. In actuality, more and more new problems are generating in modern society, so it is impossible that laws solve all the problems.
In short, I believe that the best way is to take various methods like morality and laws join hands to solve the endless problems in modern society, all of which generate from people’s minds and hearts.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 17, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: is usually
...aws to deal with them. As a child, one usually is taught to obey the laws by his family o...
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Line 2, column 464, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...n to school in order to let them become an enlighten person who will behave in a way that ob...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...beings'thinking and expression ways . So, large numbers of problems generat...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...asting food, treating others kindly, etc,. In China, Confucianism is deeply rooted...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What&apos
...d have been popular at home and abroad. what's more, arts is one way for people to r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, third, for example, in short, of course, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 48.0 14.8657303371 323% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 31.0 11.3162921348 274% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 62.0 33.0505617978 188% => OK
Preposition: 108.0 58.6224719101 184% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4103.0 2235.4752809 184% => OK
No of words: 810.0 442.535393258 183% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06543209877 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.33483823012 4.55969084622 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90549926584 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 407.0 215.323595506 189% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502469135802 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 1234.8 704.065955056 175% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 16.0 1.77640449438 901% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.38483146067 296% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.8808286383 60.3974514979 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.535714286 118.986275619 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9285714286 23.4991977007 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89285714286 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265358596258 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735776905572 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592834146288 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153643423477 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433138761075 0.0667264976115 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 205.0 100.480337079 204% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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