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The chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.
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Given is the chart comparing the total number of Olympic decorations gained by 20 different nations

It is clear to see that the United State had by far the highest number of medals, followed by Soviet union and UK respectively, in stark contrast, China and Japan had minimal levels of the medals achieved

To be more specific, the quantity of decorations of US was appoximately 2300, which double that number of Soviet union and triple that number of UK. France, Italy and Germany are 3 remaining countries which had the firgures great than 500 and ranged from 500 to 650. The number of gold one...

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Sentence: Though this figures in Sweden and Hung was better but they were far smaller than that of other nations such as Soviet Union with 2.5 times higher
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Sentence: To be more specific, the quantity of decorations of US was appoximately 2300, which double that number of Soviet union and triple that number of UK.
Error: appoximately Suggestion: approximately

Sentence: France, Italy and Germany are 3 remaining countries which had the firgures great than 500 and ranged from 500 to 650.
Error: firgures Suggestion: figures

Sentence: The number of gold ones of US still ranked fisrt with 1000 medals.
Error: fisrt Suggestion: first

Sentence: Significant discrepances between other nations were not seen in this graph as the figure of each country are well under 500.
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