"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
The argument that by limiting the number of mopeds can reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians seems tenable at first glance. However, if we see on it deeper, it will be many flaws of that statement.
First of all, reducing the number of mopeds rented can not guarantee the reducing of accident since it can happen by many factors, not only moped. In fact, accident can happen by private car, motor bike or another public transportation. To tenable the statement that more mopeds imply more accident, it necessary that author provide the statistical data of accident and show that the majority of them correlates to mopeds. In addition, reducing the number of moped rented will leads the the citizen uses their own vehicles. In this situations, the increasing of private vehicle usage will not only boost the number of accident but also make road more crowded than before.
Secondly, the notion that by limiting the number of rentals can reduce mopeds accident about 50 percent as Seville island did can not be justified. This statement can not be accepted due to many factors that make it possible in the neighboring island such as the landscape and the number of population in that island. There may be, in Seaville island, that the number of mopeds are larger than the people who use the service of mopeds. And also the landscape of that island makes people in danger if they drive mopeds. Consequently, limiting the number of mopeds will give contribution in reducing accident on Seaville island. In this situation, the author should determine the circumstances of population and the landscape on Balmer island before limiting the number of mopeds rented.
In conclusion, the argument is contain many flaws and open to debate. The author should provide more evidence in order to justify the idea.
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