the amount of sport shown on television every week has increased significantly and this is having an impact on live sports events. Do you think the benefits of having more televised sport are greater than the disadvantages?
Like other programs which we watch on TV watching live sport has its own advantages and disadvantages. But in my opinion based on below reasons it has many good points of view.
First of all by televising sports shown more people could get familiar with different kind of sports and subsequently could get more information and news about various type of sport. So they would get fond of some sport and decide to continue it professionally. As a result would have a healthy lifestyle.
Secondly, when you as an athletic like football player know that your family are watching you on the television...
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- the amount of sport shown on television every week has increased significantly and this is having an impact on live sports events Do you think the benefits of having more televised sport are greater than the disadvantages 84
Sentence: Secondly, when you as an athletic like football player know that your family are watching you on the television it makes to be more motivated and this could improve your efficiency.
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