Do you agree or disagree?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent’s jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parent’s jobs.
Human beings have had this struggle to choose a job since they had been born. Although at last times they have not had a variety of job offer, today by developing the communities they have several choices to choose. Thus, some people prefer to continue their parent’s jobs, but others choose another job. Therefore, I disagree with this statement that children select the parent’s job in the future.
By choosing the job freely, children are able to gain the self-confident and become independent in their life. They should choose the job based on the education, reality, thoughts and so forth. Unfortunately, some parents force the children to choose the job that they do now, while the children do not have any interest in this job. These bad decisions influence on the children’s mental and they always think that do not any selection rights over the lifetime. For example, I have a friend that the parents are the engineer, when he wanted to go the university, he was forced to choose engineering, whereas his interest was in medical science and now he is not successful in this major.
In addition, they can experience some new challenges in the life. They learn several new things that their parents never experienced in the past. When they confront to the new obstacles, they can solve them easily because of the experiences that have had earned during the new job. There is a Persian proverb that says, “If you want to become a creator person, you must experience new things,”.
In conclusion, although children can input to the parent’s jobs simply, they never gain things that are able to gain them by choosing other jobs because they will receive new experiences, become independent and achieve the self-confident. Thus, who can ignore these positive points and choose the parent’s jobs?
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 594, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to engineer'.
Suggestion: to engineer
...the university, he was forced to choose engineering, whereas his interest was in medical sc...
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Line 3, column 695, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...now he is not successful in this major. In addition, they can experience some ne...
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Line 5, column 397, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...r person, you must experience new things,'. In conclusion, although children ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, thus, whereas, while, as for, for example, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1541.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 304.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06907894737 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8358830982 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509868421053 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5324538182 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.733333333 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2666666667 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411850297092 0.236089414692 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168970811761 0.076458572812 221% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110005543171 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.279285687246 0.150856017488 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0854922720533 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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