One research study has indicated that many adolescents need more sleep than they are getting, and another study has shown that many high school students in our city are actually dissatisfied with their own academic performance. As a way of combining these problems, the high schools in our city should begin classes at 8:20 A.M. instead of 7:30 A.M., and end the school day one hour later. This arrangement will give students an extra hour of sleep in the morning, thereby making them more alert and more productive. Consequently the students will perform better on tests and other assignments, and their academic skills will improve significantly.
The author of the issue refers to two separate research study and further tries to combine the results of these two studies. First research study indicates that many adolescents need to get more sleep and the second study has shown that high school students in the author’s city are not satisfied with their academic performance. The author recommends that based on the first study to enhance students performances the high schools in his city should begin classes one hour later in the morning so that the students are more alert and prepared for learning. Combination of these unrelated studies does not seem sound and the recommendation can not be accepted because it rests on a number of premises each of which can be challenged.
The most striking problem is that the author does not mention in the first study that how many hours adolescents get sleep during a day. Maybe they sleep for four or five hours and the high school students go for seven hours a day. Hence, indicating the sleep hours for both groups is vital to see if the high school students are similar to each other in this case. One more problem is the difference in the population of these two samples. The author does not indicate that how many people participated in each study. In addition, the findings of one research can be generalized to another population only if the both populations are identical in all respects such as age, sex, and etc; however, in this argument the author does not state anything about these elements in both groups.
The other problem is that it is said that the high school students are not satisfied with their educational performance, however, the reason of this dissatisfaction is not elucidated so it fails to state that it derives from dearth in sleeping. Maybe the academic staff are not professional enough or the educational facilities should be improved. Therefore, the root of this dissatisfaction is so important and delaying the beginning of classes in the morning can not be the solution without considering other respects.
In the final analysis, the recommendation of the author can not be take to be correct, because as it was mentioned in the body paragraphs, it depends on a number of assumptions and many questions should be answered. The recommendation can be accepted only if the weaknesses referred to above are all removed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1963.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 400.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9075 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81333320991 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 610.2 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.9494417516 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.866666667 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6666666667 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326299785387 0.218282227539 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115086496644 0.0743258471296 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125081062578 0.0701772020484 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184027487807 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.148462773473 0.0628817314937 236% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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