teenagers have jobs while they are still student agree or disagree

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teenagers have jobs while they are still student,agree or disagree?

These days, teenagers working is a crucial argument between peoples. Some people believe that teenagers should focus on their lessons at school, and having jobs distracted them from doing their assignments and reduce their performance at school. While others believe that benefits of this issue are outweighed by its risks. I, personally, agree with the latter idea. Teenager by working can hoard some money for their future education and also they can gain a lot of experience which help them to be skillful individuals. In what follows I cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to support my point of view.
If student have part-time jobs, not only they cooperate in financial and commercial events, but also they can gain some money during their spare time and save their money for their future affairs. For example, when I was in high school, I had a part-time job in a restaurant as a waiter nearby our home. Since my father didn't earn enough salary those days, I saved all my wage and I can paid the tuition of university during my curricula with my own money and also reduced financial burden on my father's shoulder. So by having jobs, student can save a hoard of money for their future educations and so forth.
Furthermore, students get a lot of rewarding experience due to their jobs. At school , students only communicate with their teachers and their friends but when they have a job, They socialize with many different kinds of people, illiterate and literate people, young or old ones and so forth, so this is a big opportunity for them to learn how treat and adapt themselves with others. And also they learn various skills that strengthen their resume so its increase their chance to find a decent job more easily in their future.
Life has many various dimensions. And getting great grades and being a top rank student at school, are not the only objects. Working help students to extend their horizons to understand life has many different aspect. For example they understand nothing gained without diligent! For instance, for being affluent in their future, they have to try hard.
To make a long story short, I believe if teenagers have jobs while they are still students, although it may a little effect on their lessons at school, but it take them many benefits, actually cause more good than harm. All aforementioned reasons point to my idea. An important issue is that this cannot be used as a prescription for everybody and some counter examples might exist.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 247, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...and reduce their performance at school. While others believe that benefits of this is...
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Line 2, column 320, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...waiter nearby our home. Since my father didnt earn enough salary those days, I saved ...
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Line 2, column 387, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'pay'
Suggestion: pay
...ose days, I saved all my wage and I can paid the tuition of university during my cur...
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Line 3, column 84, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... experience due to their jobs. At school , students only communicate with their te...
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Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...en they have a job, They socialize with many different kinds of people, illiterate and literat...
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Line 4, column 195, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...d their horizons to understand life has many different aspect. For example they understand not...
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Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'takes'?
Suggestion: takes
...fect on their lessons at school, but it take them many benefits, actually cause more...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, still, then, while, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2068.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86588235294 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52986743357 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536470588235 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.1968474345 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.4 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230182635161 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676522526645 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562704420064 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139935774931 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274527219646 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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