Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Improving schools is the most important factor in the successful development of a country.
In the current era, It is well established beyond the doubt that quality of educational system is a monumental contributing factor to a nations fortune. So, it is crystal clear that governments in forward country will spend a remarkable portion of their annual budget on improving and elevating their educational services, especially on schools affairs spending. Regarding some others supposedly more important matters, However, some may contradict this strategy and approach. The opponents of this idea claim that some other civil services like health services and economic affairs should be regarded and enhanced efficiently beforehand. However, I personally believe that their claim is invalid, and an expenditures on obtaining a strong and stable educational system pales other affairs in comparison to educational system. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my standpoint through some outstanding points.
Consider a plant growth process. What makes it thrive as much as possible? For one thing an underlying soil which is rich of nutrients and substantial elements will benefit the plant to flourish as much as possible. The same rule obtains about a country's boom. What I mean is that a good educational system provides an appropriate infrastructure on which the country will be able to accelerate the rate of its prosperity. Efficient educational service permits a nation not to suffer a shortfall in adept managers and workers as it is the source of upcoming generation. According to a survey conducted over some of the most developing countries all over the world, two competing areas have absorbed the majority of GDP (Gross Domestic Product): Military spending and educational system expenditures, which reveal the paramount importance of having an appropriate educational system.
Furthermore, many other spending of a nation can be cut by means of teaching some relevant lessons in schools. As once Nelson Mandela said: "schools can revolutionize the future of a country". With this in mind, consider the great portion of budget which is allocated to some medicine facilities and health-care affairs. Researches indicate that a great portion of this spending is alluded to some infectious and contagious disease which can be readily prevented if people are aware of the sources of such disease. Thus, schools can be of service to this issue. Moreover, there world of today is bombarded and devastated by selfishness of some leaders all over the world, which has its roots in the lack of moral values and cultural qualities. If we teach our children to be more sympathetic and philanthropic rather than imposing their beliefs on one another, we may enjoy the fruit of these novel lesson in a long run.
By and large, schools have play a key role in a nation's fortune. It has both direct and indirect effect on a country's flourishing. Not only does it train the fallowing generation of doctors, high-ranking managers, lawyers in a country, but it also contribute to eliminating cultural handicaps. It wise enough to spend money on such productive issue, rather than wasting it on absurd military affairs. As was already mentioned, maybe a good education system allows us to have not only a more strong country, but a lovelier world.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, thus, well, i mean, by and large, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2748.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 523.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25430210325 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0083136186 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 286.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546845124283 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 866.7 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.9056944958 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.92 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.92 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.56 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.073236320918 0.236089414692 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0189654389992 0.076458572812 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0224325845065 0.0737576698707 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0433693607508 0.150856017488 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.011222442786 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 157.0 86.8835125448 181% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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