The bar chart shows the participation of children in selected leisure activities in Australia
The given bar chart compares the involvement of 5 to 14 years old children in 5 different leisure activities in Australia.
Overall, it can be seen that watching TV/videos was the most popular free time activities among both genders. With the exception of watching TV and creating Art and Craft, boys surpassed their counterparts in the remaining activities.
In detail, seeing television stood at almost 100% for boys and girls, which was the highest total as opposed to others. Second on the list was computer games at 80% for boys, considerably higher than the girls with 60%. Next came, Bike riding at about 78% (boys), a bit below computer games (80%) and females with 60%, making it (60%) similar with the amount as in playing electronic games. In the last place was Skate boarding at two-fifths (40%) for boys, whereas the net remained at approximately a quarter (26%) for females, the figure (26%) being the least sum of all the activities.
In contrast, Art and Craft started at just over half 52% (girls), compared to males at around 32%. Surprisingly, producing Art and Craft (32%) was nowhere near as attractive as looking television (100%) with respect to boys.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
lost in the last paragraph:
'Art and craft' is the only activity liked more by girls.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 199 200
No. of Characters: 919 1000
No. of Different Words: 123 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.756 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.618 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.619 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 59 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 47 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 31 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.466 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.395 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.698 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 111, Rule ID: WITH_THE_EXCEPTION_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'except' or 'except for'
Suggestion: Except; Except for
...ree time activities among both genders. With the exception of watching TV and creating Art and Craft,...
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Line 5, column 408, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'skated'.
Suggestion: Skated
...electronic games. In the last place was Skate boarding at two-fifths 40% for boys, wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, second, whereas, in contrast, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 968.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 198.0 196.424390244 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88888888889 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65162577932 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 106.607317073 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.656565656566 0.547539520022 120% => OK
syllable_count: 270.0 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.1881931144 43.030603864 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.555555556 112.824112599 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 22.9334400587 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 5.23603664747 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0825059151013 0.215688989381 38% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482517496377 0.103423049105 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121670848569 0.0843802449381 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105157639119 0.15604864568 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.165029978575 0.0819641961636 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.2329268293 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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