In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking the City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing
The author concludes that to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in town it has the only solution is to building pompous automobile manufacturing plant in undeveloped site so then unemployed people might get more job because of this plant and author will going to ask large campaign and company for his proposal. However, the conclusion relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence
Firstly, the author assumes that unemployment is major problem in town without any rigid evidences that states unemployment are only in automobile field. Author lacks credibility when he decide to build this gigantic project near undeveloped area. Author should first think about how many unemployed are really able to work in this automobile project and because of this project, problem is going to solve. He should be given more statistical data of unemployment in certain field.
In addition, the author assumes that large company and campaign will come and invest in this big project because he is offering a great tax incentives. But the author lacks the proof of assurance that he will definitely going to give incentives. He should have give more authorized contain and latter of government about this pompous automobile project.
Finally, the author assumes that the residents who left unemployed after the Computech computer software programming company will work in automobile company. The author provides no evidences and lack the interest of residents towards unemployment. He should have consider people first before selecting this huge project.
In conclusion, this argument depends on certain simplified assumption about accepting author's proposal by company and campaign just by offering significant tax incentives. The argument would have been more comprehensible if author gives more statistical figures and numbers about unemployment and jobs
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ious unemployment problem in town it has the only solution is to building pompous...
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Line 1, column 264, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'go'
Suggestion: go
...b because of this plant and author will going to ask large campaign and company for h...
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Line 3, column 188, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'decides'.
Suggestion: decides
...field. Author lacks credibility when he decide to build this gigantic project near und...
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Line 5, column 221, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'go'
Suggestion: go
...of of assurance that he will definitely going to give incentives. He should have give...
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Line 7, column 264, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'considered'.
Suggestion: considered
...ts towards unemployment. He should have consider people first before selecting this huge...
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Line 7, column 322, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rst before selecting this huge project. In conclusion, this argument depends on ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, really, so, then, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 287.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54355400697 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85155823718 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515679442509 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.5123407015 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.384615385 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0769230769 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69230769231 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20235650751 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755435400593 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0786492542691 0.0701772020484 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126390330509 0.128457276422 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107800208868 0.0628817314937 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.5979740519 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.