Nowadays in some countries, single young adults prefer to live outside of their parents homes, they usually leave to study or work in different places. Do you think this trend has more advantages or disadvantages?
In present days, a number of young single people leave their hometown to study or work in other places. It is not easy to say if this trend good or not. I will discuss both sides as following.
People can gain better education and more job opportunities in big cities. Because in small cities, there are not enough high quality schools, young people have to attend school in other cities to get better education. During grow up, young people may feel that they have the ability to live by themselves, no need to rely on parents all the times. As parents are far away, they need to solve all the pro...
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Sentence: It is not easy to say if this trend good or not.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to trend and good
Sentence: During grow up, young people may feel that they have the ability to live by themselves, no need to rely on parents all the times.
Description: A preposition is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to During and grow
Sentence: It concern problems with excessive inderpendence.
Description: The fragment It concern problems is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace concern with verb, past tense
Sentence: As all the parents want their children can get better education and find a better job in the futrue.
Error: futrue Suggestion: future
Sentence: In sum, I think the advandage of leaving home to study or work on other places are more than its disadvantages.
Error: advandage Suggestion: advantage
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Avg. Sentence Length: 14.87 21.0 (more compound or complex sentences wanted)
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.274 0.35
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 342 350
No. of Characters: 1536 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.3 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.491 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.264 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 100 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 52 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 29 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
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Sentence Length SD: 7.374 7.5
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Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.274 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.441 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.093 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5