the graph below show the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Essay topics:

the graph below show the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The diagram illustrated the proportion of population aged 65 in 3 countries USA, Japan and Sweden during 1970 to 2040. As shown at the beginning in 1940, USA had the most proportion of population in compare of two other countries (=9%) and has gradually increased also it is predicted that the amount would be gone up by 2040, at about 25% that will be more less than two other countries.
Japan had the lowest percentage of the aged 65, and this amount was increasing just before 1990 after it, the population was increasing and diagram anticipated after 2020 with a suddenly growth will be the highest aged producer among USA and Sweden.
Sweden usually was in middle of USA and Japan. Although after 2000 it was the most important aged 65 producer but diagram describe that it will be at middle in compare to two other.
So that according to graph the percentage proportion of population aged 65 usually was accompanied with growth and will be going up until 2040 near to 25%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 352, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'less' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: less
...e up by 2040, at about 25% that will be more less than two other countries. Japan had t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 177, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('suddenly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('growth') instead of another adjective.
...and diagram anticipated after 2020 with a suddenly growth will be the highest aged producer among...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was usually
...producer among USA and Sweden. Sweden usually was in middle of USA and Japan. Although af...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'diagram' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'diagrams'.
Suggestion: diagrams
...the most important aged 65 producer but diagram describe that it will be at middle in c...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 810.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 173.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68208092486 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56032174128 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531791907514 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 239.4 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.1768775067 43.030603864 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.0 112.824112599 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8333333333 22.9334400587 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.16666666667 5.23603664747 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209770379501 0.215688989381 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120728424744 0.103423049105 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0805685668465 0.0843802449381 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142098935829 0.15604864568 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701255117936 0.0819641961636 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.46 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.4329268293 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.0658536585 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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