Do you think that an ageing society will disappear? What are the advantages and disadvantages of having more old people in society?
Over the past decades, it is widely believed that the medical advancement has fostered the longevity around the globe. Despite the enhanced well-being of average citizens, this seismic shift has begot a financial burden to our society. The aim of this essay is set to explore the societal benefit pertainning to additional manpower and a detrimental effect on economy.
To begin with, there is ample evidence suggested that the elderly nowadays are generally perceived as workforce in some less strained domain. In fact, unlike a couple of century ago, senior people who absorbed sufficient nourishment’s and had shaped a healthy habit with regular workouts are deemed energetic enough to produce values to the communities in their late life. Recent empirical research from the Elderly Committee ascertained that 70% people belonging the retired age-group are still participating in voluntary works for neighbourhood entailing part-time music teaching and homework tutoring. Seen in this light, these extra workforce is likely to ameliorate the increasing demands of the corresponding sectors.
Although the benefits given to neighbourhood are remarkable, the impact of the expanding senior age-group on overall nation should not be overstated. What this means is the fact that, with inadequate personal saving and rising fee for housing and food, the major livelihood of elderly has a high tendency to be underpinned by social security and pensions they earned from the past employers. Having conducted an extensive study, the Hong Kong University established that the number of retired people who count on pension or social security has quadrupled over the pass 20 years. Considering with this line of thinking, this national expenditure has cumulated with aging population. Meanwhile, coupled with the installation of ensuing facilities designated for the elderly and the allowance that subsidising the concession fee for transportation, the economic development would be hindered under the growing contention accompanied by globalization.
In conclusion, while these passionate and committed senior workforce constitute assistants in the neighbourhood, they are also tentamount to impediments to national development. Yet, it is predicted that the aging process will remain insurmountable in foreseeable future due to the progress science and technology are making.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 159, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun century seems to be countable; consider using: 'a couple of centuries'.
Suggestion: a couple of centuries
...e less strained domain. In fact, unlike a couple of century ago, senior people who absorbed suffici...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, still, well, while, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2030.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 354.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.73446327684 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14447766629 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638418079096 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.430517675 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.0 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2857142857 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07142857143 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0713853023319 0.244688304435 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0219893606789 0.084324248473 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0268256077428 0.0667982634062 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0374572132286 0.151304729494 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234660135818 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.25 12.4159519038 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.34 8.58950901804 132% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 78.4519038076 185% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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