Topic: In some countries, some high school leavers are choosing to work or travel for a period
of time before going to university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of those school
leavers’ decision. Give your own opinion.
After graduating from high school, some students tend to get a job or go on a trip for some time
before university life. While I accept that there are benefits and drawbacks of this decision, I
would argue that it is better to take a gap year to work or travel.
The option to get a job or travel straight after school is disadvantageous to some extent. The
main shortcoming is that a number of graduating students may start their professional careers
later than their fellows who do not choose to get a job or go on a trip after high school. As a
result, they will get promoted later. In addition, traveling costs them a great deal. If they travel
right after high school, they will earn no money and have to ask their parents for the expense. It
is not advisable that people should take this option.
On the other hand, it seems to me that high school seniors should choose to work or travel for a
period of time because of some undeniable advantages. Firstly, working and traveling are both
good chances for them to gain some valuable experience. My brother, for instance, travelled to
London during his gap year. By spending time in London, he was able to hear, speak, read and
write the English language constantly which gave him countless opportunities to improve his
English skills. Secondly, taking a year out helps young graduates clarify their study and career
future. They can do various jobs without long-term commitment in this time, and discover what
might be right for them.
In conclusion, I believe that there are many advantages for young people who start working or
traveling prior to beginning their university studies, although this decision has some notable
disadvantages.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... should choose to work or travel for a period of time because of some undeniable advantages. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in short, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1442.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90476190476 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61235118831 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581632653061 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2041551994 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1333333333 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 19.0 4.38176352705 434% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277188161723 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0942903123389 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0837949794033 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0852226958351 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0740213411508 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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