Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
The live today is vastly different from it was before. Many areas in the world are affected by the enormous changes that happened whether positively and negatively. Therefore, I adamantly disagree that The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict because of the invention of sophisticated technology makes the life more comfortable and affect positively on youth’s education and professionality.
First of all, flourishing technology has a profound impact on a new generation’s achievement. In fact, the invention of technology helps the young people to follow their lives more readily. For instance, nowadays, the students can comfortably engage in their class without the need to go to their college. Students can take many courses from their home just by interacting with this technology by using the online courses without the need to go to the university. Moreover, technical innovation creates flexibility in students time; they could efficiently perform their studying-related tasks and work also by taking an online course at night and working in the morning. Hence, I believe that the youth today have a more flexible life than before.
Besides, technological development helps to make the youth life more convenient. Indeed, these innovations encourage the new era to be self-reliant and depend on themselves instead of depending on their parents which, in turn, make their lives more comfortable. For example, if the students have a specific tuff lesson, they could readily understand these lesson by searching on google using these inventions. I have a son; he is seven years old, I realized that he became to depend on himself when he wants to perform his duties and homework, he even didn’t ask me about any assistant because he used the google and youtube to find any information that he needs it. Therefore, the world wide web is the foundation to make the youths’ life much more relaxed than before.
For the reasons mentioned above, from my perspective, the new former have a much comfortable flexible life than before because of the presence of technology. Hopefully, all people appreciate these spectacular innovations.
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Essay evaluation report
The live today is vastly different from it was before.
The live today is vastly different from what was before.
happened whether positively and negatively.
happened both positively and negatively.
happened either positively or negatively.
because of the invention of sophisticated technology makes the life more comfortable
because the invention of sophisticated technology makes the life more comfortable
because of + noun/phrases
because + sentences
the youth today have a more flexible life than before.
the youths today have a more flexible life than before.
Sentence: Therefore, I adamantly disagree that The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict because of the invention of sophisticated technology makes the life more comfortable and affect positively on youth's education and professionality.
Error: professionality Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: For example, if the students have a specific tuff lesson, they could readily understand these lesson by searching on google using these inventions.
Error: tuff Suggestion: No alternate word
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flaws:
It is out of topic. Double check the topic and make sure it is correct.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? in 30
Category: ? Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 350 350
No. of Characters: 1789 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.325 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.111 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.868 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.191 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.501 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 351, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this lesson' or 'these lessons'?
Suggestion: this lesson; these lessons
...f lesson, they could readily understand these lesson by searching on google using these inve...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1860.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32951289398 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06033020635 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555873925501 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.5423492271 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.25 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8125 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121780884368 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0434966379619 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950337103256 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0942580784988 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11449591036 0.0645574589148 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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