TPO-48 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

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TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

Submitted by Nima1993 on Mon, 08/06/2018 - 12:10

In today's world, with the advent of technology and the internet, life is way more complicated than it was in the past. There is a controversy among people about whether they need to have a well-organized plan to survive on this sophisticated life or not. Some people believe that living is easy, so there is no need to have a specific plan for obtaining a good career for the living. On the other hands, critics of this theory think that a well-organized plan establishes more success toward the life of individuals. I, personally, firmly agree with a well-designed plan that put the people in a better position in every aspect of life. I will substantiate my outstanding reasons in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, a well-organized plan for short, medium and long goals is essential for being successful. A rule of being successful is put effort for establishing an achievement, and this is impossible without having a good plan. On the other hand, since the living in this period of time is very hard for everyone, people would be depressed without having a plan to organize their stuff. For instance, when I was a high school teenager, I spent most of my daily times hanging around with friends, staying out too late and so on. Therefore, it affects my high school grades and I made my parents and teachers disappointed. Consequently, this situation makes me so nervous and depression came to me and put me in isolation for many years. As time passed for years, I could recover myself through some good friend of mine. He told me that "you can make things happen if you perform a well-organized plan for your life". As a result, after years I am enjoying a successful life, being a director of a company, have the business management Ph.D. degree and achieved so many objects in my life.
Secondly, individuals are feeling satisfied by having a plan in their life. They are certain about the fact that they are very productive in their life and also would not waste a single second. Additionally, their self-esteem will be increased, so they have successful social communication. Although, with this self-confidence, they believe that nothing will stop them from achieving anything they want towards their life. Take my experience as an illustrative example. When I started my master's degree at the university, I was believing myself by picking a very hard thesis for my project. As a result, by working hard every day and assign some short term and long term goals for my plan, I finally could invent a complex system. A system that would never exist if I did not believe in my abilities and skills.
To conclude, because of the technology trend that affects the lives of the people, living in these periods of times are very hard. A well-organized plan will not only bring success and achievements in every aspect of life but also will make people believe in themselves and trust in their abilities.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 280, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...he other hand, since the living in this period of time is very hard for everyone, people would...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 524, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... my masters degree at the university, I was believing myself by picking a very hard thesis fo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2431.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83300198807 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90716977623 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500994035785 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.7058647408 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.24 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.12 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.12 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233312393985 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0694813619361 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429454998162 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147768278976 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451044437142 0.0645574589148 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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