Essay 1: Some people believe that schools should only teach children subjects which are beneficial to their future career and therefore others subjects such as music anc sports are not important. Agree or disagree?
Many individuals argue that academic should be the schools’ top priorities, because they could be favourable for students’ career in the future which non-academic subjects such as music and sports do not guarantee. From my standpoint, I utterly do not concur with this notion.
On the one hand, there are several motivations why subjects such as maths and chemistry, physics or literature could be advantageous for students to seek a well-paid job in the long run. It is indisputable that in the increasingly competitive job market, employers would require candidates to be well qualified in terms of knowledge and skills specializing in a related major. Studying academic subjects could adapt these criterions such as maths may help to ameliorate the calculating ability and logical thinking or studying literature well can support the way of presentations or email writing skill. However, I reckon that this outlook is quite short-sighted on the ground that student who pursues flying scores in academic curriculums may be not able to secure a professional job. This is because the scarcity of soft skills which can be grasped from music and sport could predispose work performance.fro
On the other hand, i suppose artistic and sporting subjects play a fundamental role in the adequate development. Firstly, if schools do not allocate money to these subjects, students would lose the enthusiasm. As a result, students are not under good conditions to seek their passions, which could be potentially their career path in the future. Many circumstances have proved popular across the world that dropping out of school and becoming a singer or a football player is a correct decision. Secondly, arts and sports could bring valuable benefits to mental and physical development. For example, playing sports games help to stimulate the adequate growth of physical strength and flexibility. Practicing regularly artistic subjects such as painting, playing guitar of the piano could feed spiritual life and reduce effectively strain after working hours.
To recap, I wholeheartedly believe that schools should not discriminate against non-academic subjects and pay attention to all subjects, which is more beneficial to students in the career path.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 907, Rule ID: FOR_FRO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'for'?
Suggestion: for
...sport could predispose work performance.fro On the other hand, i suppose artisti...
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Line 5, column 20, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...k performance.fro On the other hand, i suppose artistic and sporting subjects ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, i reckon, i suppose, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45299145299 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07693362877 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575498575499 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.282267219 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.714285714 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0714285714 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 7.06120827912 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21483449825 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695568368117 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682316262083 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152691952547 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492083305615 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 9.78957915832 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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