In countries where there is a high rate of unemployment, most pupils should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is argued that in some nations which unemployment rate consistently is higher than the others, most of the students should be attended in primary schools. And it is no good in giving an opportunity to who do not hope to land a future job in order to pusue secondary schools. In my opinion, i totally disagree with this statement due to some below reasons.
Advocating of that fact that studying in primary schools and not going to secondary ones may believe that it is one of the optimal way to alleviate the finacial burden for the government as they do not spend an amount of public money on the school expansion, teacher training fees, and then this means could be used to buy foods, drinks to remote areas without contributions from the local. From my perspective, this is a short-sighted view since this stategy may lead to the the quality of labour workforce. Due to intuitive knowledege and insufficient understanding about higher technology , primary children are unlikely to meet the demand for technological globe.
Further more, i still do not agree with the idea that it is usefulless when offering educational chances for some people who do not have an ambition finding a job because this may lead to some dire consequencies realated to crime rate. In terms of the former drawback, secondary children have stronger desire to express their unique character at all cost , they are likely to be addicted to alcohol, commit the crime which can be seen from the report of increasing rate of junvenile crime.
In my conclusion , the government should take priority over all type of schooling to increase the literacy rate and reduce umemployment rate.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1382.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90070921986 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81092710198 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595744680851 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.0641746509 49.4020404114 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.555555556 106.682146367 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.3333333333 20.7667163134 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259080722672 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.095851250413 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618600676831 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141813679835 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733682010271 0.056905535591 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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