“Some people like to live in an apartment building. Others prefer to live in a house. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.”
Since childhood, I have been told that Romans are the people who initiated the fact of erecting fences around houses. All of that portrayed an envy of isolation as well as selfishness. As a child, I would always argue that Being surrounded by people is one of the most wonderful things to live. Although many would prefer living in a house, I believe that living in an apartment building is better because it connects a person with a huge community, and apartment buildings are economical.
First, as apartment building are used by many people, one automatically becomes linked with his or her apartment-mates. The connection can be as simple as greetings or as complex and deep as empathy between people. Humans nurture relationships with people they often see. Consequently, always passing by neighbors with whom one shares an apartment building will create intimate links between them. For instance, my sister's fiance, who lives in an apartment building, used to cultivate good relationships with his apartment mates by checking on them. One day, he fell sick and all his neighbors came to assist him. All of these is due to the fact that an intimate link had grown between him and his neighbors, reason why they were eager to assist him in his pain. Living in an apartment building gives people a deep connection to the community, which will empathize with them in case of unfortune.
Second, apartment buildings are economical and help people to save their money. In fact, living in an apartment is less costy than living in a private house. In apartment buildings, electricity, water, and other bills are shared among people which constitutes an advantage for people living there. Some United Nations expatriated officer operating in Goma have changed their living habits recently. In the past, they used to rent private houses because their work required them to work in Goma for several years. However, they realized that private houses are more expensive because they had to pay many bills in addition to taxes. Currently, almost all of them shifted to apartement buildings because they discovered that renting apartment is more economical. One of the reasons is that they do not have to pay some taxes that should be paid by the owner of the compound where they live, and their electricity and water bills were reduced. Because they are an economical option, apartement buildings are more advantageous than private houses.
In conclusion, living in an apartement building benefits the most because it connects the person with the community within the building. Moreover, apartement buildings provide people with an economical option; that is, they help people save their money because people are dispensed to pay high amounts of money for bills. People should turn on apartement buildings because they benefits on a social and an economical point of view.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ects a person with a huge community, and apartment buildings are economical. F...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...th them in case of unfortune. Second, apartment buildings are economical and h...
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'benefit'
Suggestion: benefit
...rn on apartement buildings because they benefits on a social and an economical point of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2400.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08474576271 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71099612026 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466101694915 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 755.1 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0402697224 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240542029414 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0824615643902 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685691977487 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16628549658 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0251317697765 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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