Some people say that TV advertisements have benefits, while others believe the opposite. Discuss both views, give your own opinion and include examples from your experience.
Advertisements are supposed to be the form of mass communication. Presently, some people assert that advertisements shown on television are lucrative for people in many ways. By contrast, others have conflicting views. In my view, advertisements have more advantages than disadvantages. This essay intends to discuss both views before reaching a valid conclusion.
There are multifarious points to endorse the former view. First and the foremost, watching advertisements enables people to become skilful shoppers. They can buy the superior collection for themselves with the help of advertisements. To demonstrate, watching adverts give people a window to the latest and exclusive products that are coming in the market with astonishing features and facilities. In addition, people get to know about the special offers, heavy discounts on products and various schemes that are run by the commercial sectors. Consequently, advertisements play a phenomenal role to uplift the standard of shopping. What is more, some advertisements also spread social awareness about general issues related to health, environment, cleanliness, and government policies. Thus, people become advance and lift up their standard of living. On the contrary, opposite wind is also there.
To commence with, advertisements are making people extravagant in every part of the world. Buying things unnecessarily has become the habit of modern people. To illustrate, advertisements exaggerate the information about products by adding spice into the real story. Advertisement broadcasters not only hire prominent celebrities to endorse their products but also show products in gorgeous packaging. This really allures people towards products and they get encouraged to buy things whether they need or not. Lastly, advertisements promote excessive consumerism and it ultimately leads to the problem of rubbish and some environment concerns.
To recapitulate, undeniably, advertisements have few negative outcomes. However, I still believe that adverts are extremely beneficial for people to lift up their standards of shopping and social awareness.
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Comments
Check my essay sir ? Let me
Check my essay sir ? Let me know how are ideas and method of explaining? I have written one more supporting line with key thought before forming examples? Is this style better than my previous style??
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Better not to put a phrase in front of a sentence always. This is a wrong structure and will break the coherence, look:
To demonstrate, watching adverts give people a window to the latest and exclusive products that are coming in the market with astonishing features and facilities.
In addition, people get to know about the special offers, heavy discounts on products and various schemes that are run by the commercial sectors.
Consequently, advertisements play a phenomenal role to uplift the standard of shopping.
What is more, some advertisements also spread social awareness about general issues related to health, environment, cleanliness, and government policies.
Thus, people become advance and lift up their standard of living.
On the contrary, opposite wind is also there.
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Don't need one more line. Two reasons are enough.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 309 350
No. of Characters: 1761 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.193 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.699 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.209 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 144 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.045 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.218 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.28 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.436 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.035 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
But consequently, thus, to
But consequently, thus, to demonstrate.. these words develop the link between the thoughts ... why should we avoid these words .??
First we wright a key thought
Then we write supporting ideas
To demonstrate develops the link and show to examiner the next line is a supporting idea and writing in connection to key thought..
May I know why you suggest me to avoid this?
I was not informed all about it before by the Testbig
We have reminded you a lot of
We have reminded you a lot of times if you check some of the comments, but you didn't realize this issue till today. We didn't call this issue every time because it is not serious always.
Those are called 'transition words/phrases'. They are important because they improve the connections and transitions between sentences and paragraphs. They thus give the text a logical organization and structure. But overuse of transitional words and phrases can have the opposite effect and can make your writing boring or confusing when you use this style all the time:
transition words/phrases + subject + verb + object;
transition words/phrases + subject + verb + object;
transition words/phrases + subject + verb + object;
transition words/phrases + subject + verb + object;
transition words/phrases + subject + verb + object;
.....
that's the reason those warning messages always appear in your essay comments, like:
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Readers are expecting more sentence styles like more complex and compound sentences. You may check and read articles online about advanced essay writing.
Three books are suggested to
Three books are suggested to read. They will be very helpful for essay writing:
New concept English book II
New concept English book III
New concept English book IV
start reading from book II. Try to figure out how and when they use transition words/phrases. and how they use different sentence styles.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, lastly, really, so, still, thus, in addition, in my view, on the contrary, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.88025889968 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31349233742 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621359223301 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.7497547408 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5909090909 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0454545455 20.7667163134 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177237983863 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508880006185 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0401480552665 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116329789443 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.050991727848 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.34 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.23 12.4159519038 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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