The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions- Since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited. Now local development interests are lobbying for the West Lansburg council to allow an access road to-be built along the edge of wetlands. Neighboring Eastern Carpenteria: which had a similar sanctuary: has seen its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1948. In order to preserve the regions biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built "
In the letter to the editor the author claims that in order to preserve the biodiversity of the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg the West Lansburg council should not allow road to be built along the edge of the wetlands. To bolster his claim the author gives example of the neighboring Eastern Carpenteria which had a similar sanctuary and had seen a decline in otter population since repeal of its sanctuary status. However, the author makes several dubious assumptions which are needed to be addressed. This argument is logically flawed in several critical aspects.
To begin with, the author mentions about the ancient records which suggest that the tufted groundhog were in millions but this record is very old. For instance, the number of the tufted groundhogs may have reduced with the over the years due to any reasons like climate change, natural calamities, etc. The argument would have be more convincing if explicitly stated the recent records regarding the tufted groundhogs.
Secondly, the author gives example of the neighboring Eastern Carpenteria where repealing the sanctuary status has led to decline in sea otter. This example is not very convincing as author has mentioned very clearly the specific reasons behind the decline of sea otter. There could be several reasons like hunting, natural calamities, or even the sea otter have been migrated to other place. And also the policy which worked for Eastern Carpenteria will work for the West Lansburg is not sure as they are different is several aspects.
Finally, the local development is interested in building a road along the edge of the wetlands. This construction of road is not going to disturb the tufted groundhogs which are in the wetlands. If the construction would have been through the wetlands than it would have affected the tufted groundhogs and would have declined their number. But as the road is along the edge without any disturbance to the wetlands for me it seems no problem.
Thus, due to overstated flaws the argument seems to be ill-founded. However, the argument would have been strengthened if the author would have mentioned some recent records, specific details of the decline, etc. With such confirming evidence the argument begins to cohere. Without it, the argument is bereft of critical foundation and can't be deemed persuasive.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 382 350
No. of Characters: 1918 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.421 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.021 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.562 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.471 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.287 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.593 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 328, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...alamities, etc. The argument would have be more convincing if explicitly stated th...
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Line 5, column 38, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Secondly, the author gives example of the neighboring Eastern Carpenteria wher...
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Line 7, column 216, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had been'?
Suggestion: had been
...re in the wetlands. If the construction would have been through the wetlands than it would have...
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Line 9, column 134, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had mentioned'?
Suggestion: had mentioned
...ld have been strengthened if the author would have mentioned some recent records, specific details o...
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Line 9, column 337, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...nt is bereft of critical foundation and cant be deemed persuasive.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1965.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 382.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14397905759 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63654155825 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46335078534 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.868478944 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.421052632 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1052631579 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78947368421 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224406045825 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628896752157 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690971555859 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121001126341 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0829649261277 0.0628817314937 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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