Some students prefer to take a gap year and between high school university to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
People differ greatly in their views about as to whether students should take a year off before pursuing higher education. While this trend is benifical to some extent, I would contend that the drawbacks are more significant.
On the one hand, there are two compelling reasons why taking a break from studying after graduating high school exerts some positive effects on students. First and foremost, this activity may enable students to enrich themselves with real-life experiences that are advantagenous to their careers in the future. This is because, if students get a paid job during the gap time, they could learn many working skills, such as communication, teamwork, time management, which all are esstential for their future jobs. Sencondly, choosing a gap year to travel to different places can lead to an improvement in students’ social, cultural knowledge as well as self-care skills. As a consequence, not only are these students more mature, but they can also be easy to intergrate in globalised world.
On the other hand, I firmly convinced that there are more disadvantages to students who take a gap year. The main reason is that it may be difficult for students to recall the knowledge and studying skills that they acquired in high school after a year off. An exellent example of this is that when students get a physically demanding jobs in this time, they will be too tired to revise any knowledge. Another convincing reason is that travelling during the gap year can fascinate students in discovering, thus they distract from learning. This can be culprit to a decrease of the academic results of students when they continue their studying at university.
In conclusion, although spending a gap year before following university program is benefical in some aspects, such as providing students key skills and knowledge for their jobs in the future, I am of the opinion that this trend is associated with many disadvantages, including the difficult in recalling pass knowledge.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 44, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ple differ greatly in their views about as to whether students should take a year off before ...
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Line 2, column 256, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ch themselves with real-life experiences that are advantagenous to their careers ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, thus, well, while, as to, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14373088685 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88347260044 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559633027523 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.4523025632 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.384615385 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1538461538 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46153846154 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302791616808 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109420610061 0.084324248473 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464369795022 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181604607854 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441807628517 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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