Some young people have free time in the evenings after school or on days off from school. Which of the following activities would be most beneficial for young people (ages 14-18) to do in their spare time? Why?
- Gaining practical work experience either at a part time job or by volunteering in the community
- Learning to play a sport
- Learning to play a musical instrument.
Without any shadow of doubt, youth, especially at the age of 14 to 18, is everyone's prime. All of we equip with an instinct of ability, energy, high mental processing to name but a few in this period of life. Even though young people should attend to school and maybe have a lot to do as their school's tasks, but they have some precious free time which can be used for many different goals. One of the biggest controversies among people, particularly among students and their parents, is that whether they should gain practical work experiences or learn other skills like playing a sport or playing a musical instrument. As far as I am concerned, work experience is more profitable one than others. The reasons why I believe so are as follows.
In first place, nowadays, human beings pass following steps of life, for example, after high school most people attend to university which will be completely different with their previous period of lives. They will experience an independent life in which they must handle their life by themselves alone, without their parents unlike during school time. It is not to mention that dealing such a life is in required of some specific characteristics in individuals like power of earning money, communication with people that have various behaviors, attitudes, culture and so forth. If students didn’t prepare for such a time, they would hardly see a successful life, since they will have not some prerequisite for do so. By keeping this point of view in mind, I firmly believe that practical work experiences during school is a good preparation for above-mentioned time which is unavoidable. By this way, students not only are able to learn some work skill by which they can earn money when they go away to university, but also they get familiar with many diverse people. It is a beyond the price act because students perspective will be broaden. They learn how to manage their relationship whether friendship or otherwise which help them a wisdom to be more success in their both work and social lives.
On top of this, active mind of students is a blessing, I mean as they grow up although their knowledge and experiences will increase, but their mentally abilities will gradually decrease. So accordingly, they can be blossomed during this period of time, but it will happen only if they find their interests. It is crystal clear that what attract different people is related to their characteristic and mentalities. Because of that, if people wanted to find their interests, in the first step they need to know themselves, and psychologically speaking, human beings can learn their feeling and properties only by communicate with others. Gaining work experiences, no matter from part time jobs or volunteering ones, is the best way to know about our interests, and above it about our characters. Such a situation, working and being in society among others, especially by having serious responsibility students can recognize their behaviors and following that find their interests. For instance, when I was young, roughly 16 years old, I worked voluntarily in different workshops with different works' atmosphere. One of them was a group project, to build a new robot, in which we have a manager who gave each of us specific duty which was defined exactly. Even though it was a plentiful training, but I always had to work with others, and share everything with my groupmates. In contrast, another one was a group project without direct manager, and without linking everyone's duty to another one. I had time to create new thing by my own self, find ways to my problems, and finally reported my experiences to our manager. These two particular jobs, have given me a valuable lesson to me that I interested to works in all of which I can have time being alone, thinking alone, innovating something and so forth. Thanks to those days finding, I chose programmer as my job which is close to my characteristics and interests.
In summary, by taken this into account, I strongly believe that gaining experience throughout working in youth bring us invaluable outcomes by all of which not only we can prepare for our future life, but also we are able to find our interests. Who can in their right mind deny the value of youth's free time which must use in the most advantageous way?
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 370, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...recious free time which can be used for many different goals. One of the biggest controversies...
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Line 4, column 238, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ngly, they can be blossomed during this period of time, but it will happen only if they find t...
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Line 4, column 678, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...aining work experiences, no matter from part time jobs or volunteering ones, is the best ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, finally, first, if, may, so, for example, for instance, i mean, in contrast, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 88.0 43.0788530466 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 103.0 52.1666666667 197% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3596.0 1977.66487455 182% => OK
No of words: 735.0 407.700716846 180% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8925170068 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.20681125291 4.48103885553 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80044290211 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 352.0 212.727598566 165% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478911564626 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1106.1 618.680645161 179% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 15.0 4.94265232975 303% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.556655143 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3448275862 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8275862069 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341815067077 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088277624279 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707667511745 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219724440626 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0674523960366 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 86.8835125448 169% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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