TPO 54- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Basically, governments are the notable parts of a society whose duties are to spend the national treasures and money of a country equitably. although it can be a contentious debate over the fairness, and what discern equality. this debate is prodigiously vast, but a sample controversial argument can be whether the governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored olympic teams. From my own perspective, the supporting athletics is a better option. In the ensuing lines, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons to advocate my viewpoint.
The first reason coming to mind is concerned with the issue that sport is a broad appealing activity and hobby among the people. As it was mentioned before, the most important factor that should be considered to answer this question is people. In my opinion, nowadays people are more likely to enjoy watching sports than arts. For example, in my country iran, every day a lot of art galleries are being held all over the country, including painting, calligraphy, and pottery. but, a majority of people are not even aware of them, which the reason might be that people really do not care about that. While, during last football world Cup in Brazil, iran played against Argentina and the match was fascinating. iran, unfortunately, defeated narrowly with one goal. For weeks after the match, people all over the country were talking about the match and they really loved the effort that the team had shown. If iran had won the match, I cannot imagine how much it would cheer up the nation, and I am sure iran is not an exception in this case. As a result, when I think about how much people love football, and other sports, it comes to a conclusion that governments should definitely spend more money to provide advancements in athletics.
Another equally important reason to be mentioned is the importance of sport worldwide. nowadays, the great international competitions are not as simple as it would be in the past. countries usually tend to have a monopoly in a particular sport, and by that, they actually boast about their power. Also, the number of sports infrastructure can be a manifest of development. Take the olympic games, as an example. The united states, as one of the most powerful countries, had been dominated the competitions for decades. In olympic 2008 in Beijing, china, however, they lost their monopoly and china could grasp the first place. The united states government spent a lot of money to retake their reign again, and they actually did it in London 2012 olympics.
From what has been discussed, we may reach the conclusion that governments should spend money in support of athletics. it is hard to disguise the effects that sports have on the people of the society. In addition, nowadays sport is an indication of development among countries. although the passage, merely is a personal idea of mine and might not be absolutely true. As Benjamin Franklin once said, “In this world, nothing can be said to be certain, except death and taxes.”
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, really, so, while, for example, i think, in addition, such as, talking about, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2582.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 521.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95585412668 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76184610093 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529750479846 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 796.5 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.554365354 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2142857143 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6071428571 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35714285714 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214152819911 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507372469255 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100267015533 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14152985632 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119483228245 0.0645574589148 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.