Some people think that certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of put behind the bars
To what extend do you agree?
It is essential to provide some sought of punishment to the criminals in order to control the crime rate in the country. Few people assert that offender of certain crimes, must made to do some community service activities, without being paid for that, rather than putting them in jail. I completely agree that offender of minor crimes should serve their sentence by involving in community services.
The predominate benefit of involving the criminals, specially juvenile and person who has committed minor crime like pick pocketing, is allowing them to become the part of the society. Many a times they feel neglected, and often re-offend when released from bars. If they are allowed to do the community services, like working in temples, serving the old age and orphan children's, they will become considerate about others. This activities will definitely help to change the mindset and cultivate positive thinking, might also helpful in develop some values in them. Therefore, involving offenders in community service will unequivocally help in controlling the crime rate.
Another point to consider, is the negative impact of putting the offender's in jail. It will have detrimental effect on the overall thinking, because in bars they will mix with other criminals and thrive more negative things. In other words, they will more ideas of committing different crimes. The main purpose of punishing the criminal is to make them realize there mistakes and so that they feel guilt for the act performed. If they will be surrounded by another criminals the purpose will not be served, as they will feel that everybody is doing the same deeds. Hence, putting in bars is not solving the issue, infect will have adverse effect on the person's mind.
In conclusion, I believe that by getting involved in unpaid activities for society, criminal of minor offend will change their way of thinking and crime will be decline, because they will not feel isolated. Moreover, punishing by putting them in jail will not ripe any advantage.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a time' or simply 'times'?
Suggestion: a time; times
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1701.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13897280967 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59357068943 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552870090634 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2006058627 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.3125 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6875 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4375 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142955005538 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0500327817203 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061770214496 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105860429913 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0765073940191 0.056905535591 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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