Write about the following topic:
In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment.
What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
It is true that the unemployment rate has to skyrocket in several nations. These days many highly qualified, skilled people are struggling to get a decent job in many countries. However, they are the cornerstone of our development of society. There are colossal factors are responsible for this situation such as economic recessions and a huge population of graduates
To begin with, economic downturns is the leading reason. Obviously, as the economic condition in the globe, many employers are starting to fire their employees or stop hiring new people. The companies often seek for employees with less salary and that creates problems for highly skilled and educated students who prefer to remain unemployed rather than being poorly paid. For example, some organizations would lay off the employees in the marketing department. It can help to company tightly control costs and some departments are useless in an economic crisis. Consequently, some professional graduates receive no job offer.
The best solution for this problem is stimulating economic growth of the entire world. When the economic recovery, organizations need more specialist in different areas helping them to operate and expand the companies. As a result, highly qualified graduates would not have unemployment problems.
Next, numerous highly qualified graduates’ step into society every year is the coming reason. Comparing to the past, students are easier to receive tertiary education in the whole world these days. It leads to the excess supply of university students in the job market. For instance, there are over 10 thousand fresh graduates who have a degree certificate or above in Hong Kong. Frankly speaking, the number of university graduates have a significant increase since the begin of 21 centuries. On the other hand, organizations are more willing to employ some unskilled employees with a relatively low salary. There are not enough job positions for these graduates.
The only solution is graduates accepting some low-paid jobs and gaining some experiences first. Not only expanding job scope but also increase employer’s confidence. Practice makes perfect. Then, employers are more likely to spend money on hiring an experienced employee rather than a graduate with zero work experience.
In conclusion, the financial crisis and the excessive number of graduates is the main problem of unemployment.
Hope my suggestions could address this issue.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 368, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Line 7, column 473, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...uates have a significant increase since the begin of 21 centuries. On the other hand, org...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, frankly, however, if, so, then, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2092.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 379.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51978891821 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.954289831 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588390501319 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9945725749 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.68 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.16 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144379797704 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0373460877645 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389507982494 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0682292867148 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404610930115 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.14 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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