In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university study. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
Nowadays, people normally discuss about the plan they are going to do between the time of finishing high school and starting university study. In some developed countries, the young recently are supported to have a break between two periods to go to work or travel the new place. From my point of view, I believe that it is important for young people to develop communication, attain maturity and in this assignment, I will show that this way has both its benefits and drawbacks.
First of all, it can be denied that this way will get the well-prepared for young people before they have to decide on their own. Students in the high school sill have the huge supports from their parents while being freshmen in the university means that they are legally mature and have the full responsibility, obligation of adults. They can’t rely on their parents much as they used to when in high school and have to make up their own mind. But the step between being a children and being an adult is a long-term and people normally need time to grow up gradually. So a short-break to work or travel will give them the chance to grow up and learn how to face to the realistic world. They can get a lot of experience at the workplace such as find out how to behave with the colleagues, develop their own relations… or have the possibility to ascertain culture, character, tradition from new regions.
Besides, there are some cons for young people who decide to break a short-time before going to the university. It is certain that breaking a short-time is contrary to the other’s ways - traditionally applying to a university immediately after finishing the high school. People who follow this way will don’t have to worry about spend their time on learning the knowledge at the high school again to catch up the lesson in the university, which approximately the gap-year student will have to do. Additionally, a recent survey questioned 100 people who have a gap-year about the ability of going back to school after a short-break. A surprising information from this survey revealed that 76 people who took part in review didn’t have intention to go back to school, which accounts for above 75%. All their reasons conclude that the break between 2 periods had raised their laziness and prevented them from return to school.
In a nutshell, as every coin has two sides, the gap-year has both its pros and cons. To me, the moment when people go to university is not as important as they finish their own university studies.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, so, well, while, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 41.998997996 167% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 438.0 315.596192385 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7899543379 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72837791668 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481735159817 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 634.5 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.0682611773 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.411764706 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7647058824 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47058823529 7.06120827912 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342828518771 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121537123637 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0856860420075 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233170641464 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118466404626 0.056905535591 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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