TPO 49 - Integrated writing
The lecture and the reading passage discuss humpback whales long distance migration for feeding and mating. Although the passage claims that humpback whales may be navigating by stars during their migrations, the speaker refutes this idea through a number of reasons which I will describe in this report.
First and foremost, the passage points out that humpback whales' brains have a high degree of complexity, so they are intelligent enough to use stars to navigate by. The lecturer, in contrast, rejects this by claiming that there is not any real connection between intelligence and use of stars for navigation. He adds that some birds such as ducks use stars for navigating during their migrations. On the other hand, we know that ducks have an average cognitive ability, and they are born with the star-based navigation ability. Therefore, there is not any clear relationship between intelligence and navigation by stars.
Furthermore, unlike the reading passage which states that migrating in straight lines could be good evidence of using stars for navigation, the professor argues that the external force that humpback whales use for migrating in straight lines could be the Earth magnetic field because they have biomagnified in their brains, which make them able to sense the magnetic field of the Earth, and they could use it instead of stars for traveling in straight lines.
Finally, although the passage says that humpback whales may do spy-hopping in order to watch the stars and navigate by them, the speaker disagrees by mentioning that other animals which do not migrate like sharks do spy-hopping too, and they do it just for hunting. In addition, humpback whales do spy-hopping during the day that there are not any stars in the sky. Thus, spy-hopping is not a good reason for using stars to navigate.
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- TPO 47 80
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, thus, in addition, in contrast, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1534.0 1373.03311258 112% => OK
No of words: 299.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13043478261 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63048102662 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498327759197 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 457.2 419.366225166 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 107.556558253 49.2860985944 218% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 139.454545455 110.228320801 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1818181818 21.698381199 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0909090909 7.06452816374 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.471785004083 0.272083759551 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185196177697 0.0996497079465 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0794687122825 0.0662205650399 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.293246098911 0.162205337803 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0173057235869 0.0443174109184 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.3589403974 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.0289183223 114% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 63.6247240618 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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