Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
In the few decades, with the development of technology, advertisements of products have come up more than it used to be. I still remember when I was a child, the advertisements were just the posters on the wall or in some shops’ showcases. However, as time goes by, it is no longer strange for us to see advertisements on the television. In my point of view, advertisements make the products seem much better than they really are.
Food advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. To increase the sale, food companies usually exaggerate the taste, the nutrition and the amount of their products. For instance in advertisements of instant noodles, they will show the audience that every bowl of their instant noodles contains a plenty of vegetables and meat, and the soup in it also tastes delicious. However, the moment you open the package, you will find that there are only few dehydrated vegetables and meat, and that the soup are made of contains monosodium glutamate, chicken powder and other additives, which have strong taste and make you thirsty after drinking the soup. Aside from instant noodles, the advertisements of wine usually exaggerate that drinking wine benefits our health by improving our blood circulation, but the fact is that the harm alcohol brings to our health outweighs this so-called merit.
Furthermore, advertisements of skin care products make products seem much better than they really are. Knowing that most of us hope to be young again, advertisers always attempt to create an illusion that if you use their skin care product, your skin will be as smooth as an adolescent, or that these product can whiten your skin in just a few days. However, it is not difficult for us to notice that very few users can have the miraculous effects described in advertisement, not only because the model in it has good and fair skin before using the products, but also because some of these effects are created by computers.
In addition, advertisements of the clothes also seem much better than they really are. Clothes companies usually employ popular stars and famous models to wear their products in advertisements. Most of these people have not only a stunning appearance but also a tall and fit body shape, making an illusion to audience that people who wear the same clothes will also look wonderful. However, a large number of customers are not as slim and tempting as they are, so they will not have the same effect as the stars and models do. What is more, customers may also find some clothes have difference in color and shape comparing to the ones in advertisement. In fact, some of the pictures in advertisements are edited with computer in order to make the color and shape of these clothes look better. Therefore, all these factors above lead to a result that few customers can buy clothes they satisfy.
To sum up, most information in advertisements is overstated.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, really, so, still, therefore, for instance, in addition, in fact, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2445.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91951710262 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82546986561 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466800804829 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.0629245493 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.25 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.85 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365678676392 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145904066258 0.076458572812 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.180074691792 0.0737576698707 244% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209503800077 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645778208008 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.