All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children’s schools.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Whether all parents should be required to volunteer time to their children’s schools could be weighed for many aspects. However, the claim is problematic because it fails to tell us what kinds of parents are suitable for doing this in the first place.
First, asking all parents to be volunteers in their children’s schools is too astringent. In this modernized society, both of many children’s father and mother have a job at least respectively. If they are white or blue collars, they may work from 9 A.M. to 5 F.M. Simultaneously, children have to go to school during these 8 hours. Therefore, it will be difficult for these children’s parents to be volunteers in their schools because they are too busy with work. However, if children’s one of parents is stay-at-home mother or father, this claim may be more suitable because he or she can do a volunteer job for kids’ school and take care of kids.
In addition, this claim may produce a variety of “helicopter parents”. When these parents are doing a volunteer job in their children’s schools, it is more convenient for these parents to “supervise” their children’s behavior and their social activities. At the same time, their children may be fear of doing something that their parents don’t like or think inappropriate, they will do all behaviors to satisfy their parents’ want and just like making themselves play a role of marionette and operated by their parents. Gradually, they will tend to conceal and mask their true wants; and therefore, it will be likely that they will lose their own true thoughts. Hence, maybe parents should respect their children’s privacy and give them more freedom and flexibility in their schools.
It is true that by doing a volunteer job in their children’s schools these parents can know more about their children’s study and social condition in a close distance. When they need something or have some problems, these parents can take care of them and give them help. Yet, there may be other alternative ways to resolve these problems. For example, in Taiwan there is always a chief teacher distributed in every class. What a chief teacher has to do are not only teach their students for knowledge in their professional field but also manage their social behaviors, understand every students’ condition or thoughts, and make them cooperate with other classmates. In school, these chief teachers’ job is as approximately the same as these students’ parents. If their parents want to know more about their children in school, they can keep close contact with children’s chief teacher.
In conclusion, maybe it will be more appropriate when the claim is restricted to parents who have enough free time to do a volunteer job. At the same time, since we all don’t like to have “helicopter parents,” parents need to respect their children’s privacy more and make them more independent. If parents really want to know more about their children, it will be more suitable to seek alternative methods rather than be a volunteer job to supervise them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 217, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...;t like to have 'helicopter parents,' parents need to respect their children...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, as to, at least, for example, in addition, in conclusion, it is true, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 65.0 33.0505617978 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2657.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 510.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20980392157 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28374007282 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421568627451 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 784.8 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4999197624 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.772727273 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1818181818 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.21951772744 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251698006534 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110106239341 0.0831039109588 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716366993305 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188349232437 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294089340854 0.0667264976115 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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