Schools should do more to prepare students for the non-academic aspects of
adulthood.
Future of the any country is int he hands of their present generation and that can be unequivocal by the power of Education. While some are of the opinion that schools should emphasis more more academic education, many believe that non-academic education is as eminent as the previous one. I support my assestion from some legiminate reasons.
Many Schools emphasis more on academics due to which they achieve great heights in their economic career but fail to understand the relationships in their quoditian life. The relatinship between their parents, spouse, relative, friends, etc are not taught subsumed in the school academics as they do not show the visible results in terms of grades in the semester "progress report", hence many students fail to learn the art of working out relationship. For instance, as stated by Indian Penial Court, they receive more then 100 plus cases of divorce in a month reasoning that it simply did not worked out as they fail to understand each other's point of view.Moreover AIIMS psychologist Ms. Vineeta Khanna quoted in the newspaper THE HINDU that she receive 40 plus cases of distorted marriages, uneven relationship between son and parents per week which the area of concern int he present generation. Had they been taught the affectiveness of the relationship in schools as rudumentary education, they would have a knowledge on the processo of working out of any relationship they exhibit.
Secondly, In india many school neglect the importance to sports and physical exercise in there curriculum. In china, we observer the increasing number of gold medelist in the oylampics every year whereas Indian sports achievers either remain same or decrease per year. This is due to the fact that chianese Government support the rise of sports culture from the very beginning of their middle school. Due to this, the scrutnizing process in much efficient as compare to India where sportmenship is not consider primary in terms of career choice.
On the contrary, I agree that school academics are important factor for a students but we must not neglect other factors as life depends upon relationship, physical exercise, sports, etc and academics is just one of them.
In conclusion, its important to create the work-life balance rather emphasing on a single factor. It open many doors to live a serene life.
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but, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, whereas, while, for instance, in conclusion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1998.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 385.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18961038961 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8561320526 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 100.132488764 60.3974514979 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.714285714 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 23.4991977007 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 5.21951772744 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 33.0 7.80617977528 423% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
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Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608697222911 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083265444814 0.0758088955206 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101579360896 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0728686295019 0.0667264976115 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.1392134831 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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