Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem.
To what extent do you agree with this statement ?
Health is a remarkable issue in a contemporary society. It is worth noting that unhealthy habits is extremely popular in many children. That is one of the key issues need be focused on by family and schools. Personally, I strongly believe with this view.
First of all, there is a reality that today many kids have more activities is not good for their health. Firstly, they tend to fond of sedentary lifestyle. The kids just want to stay at home and play video games instead of going outside and doing some exercises. Secondly, many children today is a massive fan of fast food and junk food like fried chicken, hamburger, fish and chip and so on. All kind of foods are not good for their health, it increases the risk of obesity as well.
Therefore thus, schools and parents are two main factors that can be responsible for working this problem out. The first factor that is school, they should take action seriously by organizing more outdoor activities for their pupils. Through extracurricular activities, the pupil can mix in more with classmates and do more activities improving health as well. Regarding family, parents should pay more attention to their childs by talking with them more and giving them advice and motivation to do exercise. The best way that all parents and their childs should do exercise together.
In conclusion, unhealthy lifestyle bring many drawback to the children’s health is evidently. And the kids would increase the risk of dangerous disease if they did not change their bad habits. Schools and parents play a pivotal role to solve this problem and bring a healthy and active life to their children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Suggestion: many drawbacks
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1368.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90322580645 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61688021798 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584229390681 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.4047610415 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.4705882353 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4117647059 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23917965143 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074300933118 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656118612136 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139183937721 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337739544591 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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