the grap show information about the languages that 13 year old students in one school chose to study.

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the grap show information about the languages that 13 year old students in one school chose to study.

The chart compares how 13-year-old students’s tendency to select languages to study in a school in England since 2000.

At the beginning point, there was a remarkable difference between the number of french learners and mandarin learners. during this time period, these numbers changed dramatically in two different ways.

during the period between 2000 and 2005, the number of students choosing mandarin to study went up sharply and reached a peak of just under 80 learners in 2005. By contrast, in the first year of this period, the number of students studying french was almost fifteen times higher than that of mandarin learners. However, this number dropped significantly in the next five years, from 150 to about 90 students.

From 2005 to 2008, the figure of pupils choosing study mandarin fluctuated between 65 and 75 students. In the same way, there was a fluctuation in the number of french learners from 90 to 100 learners. between 2008 and 2009, the french learner numbers fell slightly and after that, it remained steady at about 90 pupils. On the other hand, mandarin learner numbers had increased at the same rate since 2008.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: During
... french learners and mandarin learners. during this time period, these numbers changed...
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Suggestion: During
...dramatically in two different ways. during the period between 2000 and 2005, the n...
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Suggestion: Between
...rench learners from 90 to 100 learners. between 2008 and 2009, the french learner numbe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, in the same way, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 32.9175257732 21% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 26.3917525773 163% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 965.0 937.175257732 103% => OK
No of words: 190.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07894736842 4.54256449028 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60460385065 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568421052632 0.622605031667 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 259.2 290.88556701 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.13402061856 33% => OK
Article: 5.0 0.824742268041 606% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 1.44329896907 693% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.3846263043 44.8134815571 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.5 76.5299724578 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 16.8248392259 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 4.34317383033 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0970994419248 0.216113520407 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446227737689 0.0766984524023 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773519139369 0.0603063233224 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.088746960746 0.12726935374 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105725759324 0.0580467560999 182% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 8.37731958763 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 8.71597938144 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 7.59969072165 100% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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